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A collection of snippets of the books I write and, occasionally, my life and the things that inspire my writing...

Sunday, August 28, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors August 28, 2016

 
Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-)  The last Sunday in August already! I'm not really ready for summer to be over, but I do look forward to cooler fall weather. How about you?

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found  HERE.               
This week's snippet: We're back to our main character,  Lily, and her dog Jobe, in a holding cell on an alien ship. Last week's snippet ended with: Dev Areen stuck out his chest and looked around. “Who among you would earn extra food?”
We continue from there...

“Good food, not the slop you’ve been eating. Come forward,” Dev Areen said.
The guards spoke at the same time as their crowing leader, glancing at him every few seconds. They were probably translating to other languages for her cellmates. But Dev Areen had chosen very clear Earth English to deliver his message. Why was he making sure she understood this?
“Big” was pathetically inadequate to describe the prisoner who walked toward the cocky Bulrager. The guards drew weapons, slowing down the behemoth.

That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

Sunday, August 21, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors August 21, 2016

Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) 

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found  HERE.               
This week's snippet: We're back to our main character,  Lily, and her dog Jobe, in a holding cell on an alien ship.

Lily jerked awake, filled with the trembling an adrenaline rush brings. The door opening coincided with a deep, drumming noise that resonated like an ancient gong. Three Bulrager guards walked in, the bright light of the hall silhouetting them making it impossible to see their faces. But there was no mistaking the voice that spoke; she’d know that cock-sure arrogance anywhere. She pulled Jobe close, and braced for them to try to take him.
Dev Areen stuck out his chest and looked around. “Who among you would earn extra food?”
Was this his best authoritative posturing? She had to fight hysterical laughter brewing in her belly; he looked so much like a rooster, the way he strutted as he spoke. Then she shuddered, thinking that a rooster would strike out and draw blood, too.


That's it. What works? What doesn't?  I appreciate your comments and learn from them. :-)

Sunday, July 31, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors: July 31st, 2016



Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-)  Holy moly, it's almost August!

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found  HERE.               
This week's snippet: The male MC, Theusand,  can sense fear, and he's using that to try and locate an "intellectai" on board the Dai Klavven ship he's responsible for maintaining the peace on. The intellectai is, of course, our female MC, Lily.

He headed for deck four. When the vertical transport doors opened, the wave of fear hit him hard. He nearly doubled over before he filtered it, controlling the intensity of the emotion slamming him. He took off to his left, and after a dozen steps the wash lessened. He reversed course. The fear grew again.
His long strides hurried him toward the source. He assessed as he walked. The Intellektai was female, terrified, angry, sad, and her mind was powerful. Then the oddest part of it all dawned on him; she had no idea her emotions were reaching out to others.


That's it. What works? What doesn't?  I appreciate your comments and learn from them. :-)

Saturday, July 23, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors July 24, 2016








Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) 

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found I'm doing a change-up today. Moving a bit forward in the book. The male MC is about to be introduced in a vague way. HERE



Theusand twisted his hair into a knot at the nape of his neck then slid on loose black pants and a hooded robe. His wardrobe served the purpose it was designed for; towering above most, the hood hid much of his face in a dark shadow. It wasn’t often someone had the nerve--or the stupidity--to look into the darkness to see his eyes—to tempt the devil, some said. In spite of that opinion, he was no devil, at least not any more than he could help but be.
He was ready to kneel when he felt it: A wash full of fear.  Without hesitation, he was on the hunt. The emotional deluge gained strength as he descended into the heart of the ship. Covering the first three floors without stopping, he ruled out a source in the command areas, the private quarters,  bunk areas, dining and other social areas. All that was left were the two floors containing the contractors' quarters, slave cells, and the supply holds.

Hmmm??? And we know who is in a slave cell. Could she be calling for help without knowing it?? 
That's it. What works? What doesn't?  I appreciate your comments and learn from them. :-)

One quick note. I'm participating in my first ever facebook book bash. It has been surprisingly fun.  Thought I'd be nervous and hang back and watch, but it's been easy to gab in the comments. Victory Tales Press & PbRJV are the publishers behind it. Our own Weekend Warrior, Karen Michelle Nutt is the acquisition editor for them.  I'm the host this Friday evening starting at 8:00 PM EST. I'm going to give away some fancy braided bookmarks and a signed print copy of 'Have Yourself a Merry Little Romance' during my stint. Might be more items.  And there is an ongoing contest to give away a snake chain with two Murano glass charms. All you have to do is a leave a comment about your favorite Christmas cookies. Contest. And there is this Contest  .  All of my contests end midnight, July 30th, and winners chosen Sunday, July 31st. There are lots of ebooks being given away in contests--Karen has some fun contests going on, and there's also a "name that movie" contest.  Come and check out all of the great authors at this event. :-)

Sunday, July 17, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors, July 17, 2016



Hello all my fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) 

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE




Setup:  The main character, Lily, and her dog, Jobe, are prisoners on an alien ship. They're being transported by galactic slavers--to be sold. Last week the captors dumped mystery food into the holding cell, followed by a second round. The last sentence last week was this: "She put her hands together and scooped up what appeared to be a cooked grain."
         We pick up from there:
 

She licked the mound in her hands, the taste similar to rolled oats.
There really was no choice. It was this, the mystery meat, or starving to death. She quit assessing the food; it would do her no good  to discover that it also had an animal source. She shared with Jobe again. He nibbled on some, but she ate the lion’s share.
Someone banged at the open panel above the cell. Lily looked up in time to see to see a Bulrager waving the prisoners aside then motioning toward the floor beneath the opening.  Several buckets appeared, the liquid inside them sloshing as they were lowered. 
Another mad rush ensued, and she was part of it this time.
That's it. What works? What doesn't?  I appreciate your comments and learn from them. :-)

Sunday, July 10, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors: July 10, 2016



Hello all my fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) 

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE




Setup:  Earth has been invaded by aliens, galactic slavers. Our MC, Lily, and her dog, Jobe, were captured.  Moving ahead a little in the story: They were loaded onto a shuttle and their captors hauled them off the surface into space.  They were transferred to a large holding cell filled with creatures of all sorts, and none seemed friendly until some French speaking Earthlings were thrown into the same cell. A load of mystery food was dumped onto the floor in the center of the large cell. Lily scooped up some of it in her hands. The last sentence last week was this: "She had no idea what she was grabbing, but when she left the frenzy, she had two fists full.
         We pick up from there:
 

She returned to her place where Jobe waited. While she sniffed the slop, she watched for anyone approaching. A faint scent of vinegar mingled with the smell of meat.  She handed some to Jobe. When he devoured it, she gave him the rest, unsure if she could eat it anyway. Where the hell do you get meat out in space? The first  possibility that popped into her mind left her feeling queasy, but Jobe had no qualms about the source of his food.
Another load fell from the ceiling. She waited until the first wave of prisoners finished mobbing the new pile and moved away with their hands full, and then she went back. She put her hands together and scooped up what appeared to be a cooked grain.



That's it. What works? What doesn't?  I appreciate your comments and learn from them. :-)