tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post233023207285569717..comments2024-03-10T05:18:37.521-04:00Comments on Stories From A Starry Sky: Weekend Writing Warriors March 20, 2016Teresa Cypherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comBlogger35125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-70363971010978666242016-03-26T20:40:04.562-04:002016-03-26T20:40:04.562-04:00Oh, crap. Can't wait to find out what happens ...Oh, crap. Can't wait to find out what happens next.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13837948914402096224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-49623176599852492152016-03-26T14:55:51.029-04:002016-03-26T14:55:51.029-04:00Food and entertainment... two words one NEVER want...Food and entertainment... two words one NEVER wants to hear in a situation like this. Great build-up to coming events.JTsuruokahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05173187123835069767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-87741802337651597172016-03-21T21:31:02.229-04:002016-03-21T21:31:02.229-04:00Well that's turning out badly, but that's ...Well that's turning out badly, but that's good for the story! And yeah, still worried about Jobo, because human characters are *supposed* to wind up in bad places but the little animals, we always worry about them! Good excerpt, continuing the strong tension. Marciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07092928480361131154noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-78046698173111833762016-03-21T20:58:49.418-04:002016-03-21T20:58:49.418-04:00Respect your disrespect? What an odd thing to say....Respect your disrespect? What an odd thing to say...<br /><br />But oh yes, just when you think things can't get worse, they sure as hell do. *Shivers* Chilling. Poor Jobe, I hope he runs and escapes. I'm not sure I want to find out what "entertainment" will be. Well done!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-39717389726945992022016-03-21T16:41:14.206-04:002016-03-21T16:41:14.206-04:00Not sure which is worse - being food or being &quo...Not sure which is worse - being food or being "entertainment". Not good - let's hope Lily can get herself out of trouble before Jobo gets munched!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14612014503133683333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-72420035067189722252016-03-21T04:01:53.279-04:002016-03-21T04:01:53.279-04:00Oh poor Jobo! (Why is it we instantly worry about ...Oh poor Jobo! (Why is it we instantly worry about the poor pooch in these stories?) Wow, so cold... food and entertainment. Not a happy situation at all.Chelle Corderohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15412268726863698528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-7654667274538907802016-03-20T22:09:21.317-04:002016-03-20T22:09:21.317-04:00Yikes! Sorry I must mimic Caitlin. It was the firs...Yikes! Sorry I must mimic Caitlin. It was the first thing I thought of too. lol I'm hoping she has a way out of this. Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-38365726166316895682016-03-20T22:04:08.640-04:002016-03-20T22:04:08.640-04:00Yikes! I'm not sure what's worse, to be fo...Yikes! I'm not sure what's worse, to be food or entertainment. I suspect the latter is a slower death...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18141508426287090331noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-91500468497007920842016-03-20T21:13:30.659-04:002016-03-20T21:13:30.659-04:00Re: dialogue and punctuation. It looked good to me...Re: dialogue and punctuation. It looked good to me. "He pointed at Jobe and said, “Food,” then he pointed at her and added, “Entertainment.”<br /><br />I'm fond of this split quotation device that keeps the action moving forward. Gem Sivadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01233835029255570402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-2793944478267486322016-03-20T20:35:12.796-04:002016-03-20T20:35:12.796-04:00Out of the frying pan into the fire. Poor girl.Out of the frying pan into the fire. Poor girl.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-38163687865190176452016-03-20T17:47:12.166-04:002016-03-20T17:47:12.166-04:00That last word frightens me. I pray she can get ou...That last word frightens me. I pray she can get out of this. Jenniferhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04950660535423771434noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-25023006623553974932016-03-20T17:31:10.118-04:002016-03-20T17:31:10.118-04:00GAK! I'm already regretting her actions for he...GAK! I'm already regretting her actions for her! "Food" and "entertainment"?? OMG this is NOT sounding good for either of them. Can't wait for next week!Jhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11457235963917206588noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-89021410155657576702016-03-20T16:09:00.927-04:002016-03-20T16:09:00.927-04:00OMG! Talk about bad news! Great snippet filled wit...OMG! Talk about bad news! Great snippet filled with tension and emotion.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-60829716318542158222016-03-20T14:21:21.609-04:002016-03-20T14:21:21.609-04:00Nooooooooo! Oh, please tell me they get out of it....Nooooooooo! Oh, please tell me they get out of it. Hurry up next week!<br /><br />~Joyce ScarbroughThe Belle in Bluehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16368021976814668783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-26947767318134862252016-03-20T13:49:11.490-04:002016-03-20T13:49:11.490-04:00Oh no! Surely they don't want to eat the dog?...Oh no! Surely they don't want to eat the dog? Rescue them both - soon. Good snippet, and the punctuation looks good too. Although I am the last person who should be passing judgement on that.Rachel de Vinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13142396128885291395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-82970642471650500132016-03-20T13:31:26.909-04:002016-03-20T13:31:26.909-04:00Chilling. I hope she releases Jobe and sends him ...Chilling. I hope she releases Jobe and sends him away... P.T.Wyanthttp://ptwyant.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-10971532264091213762016-03-20T12:54:37.266-04:002016-03-20T12:54:37.266-04:00How delightful! Please tell me it gets better soo...How delightful! Please tell me it gets better soon.Aurora Springerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10368905407459425208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-25971293804937402702016-03-20T12:36:24.588-04:002016-03-20T12:36:24.588-04:00Probably not good to be either one actually, food ...Probably not good to be either one actually, food or entertainment! Putting my scifi reader hat on, I'm having trouble imagining a smile on an alien bug's face. That took me out of the scene a bit since you did such a goo job of making me 'see' them as buglike. Their emotions and ours wouldn't necessarily track that well. Maybe he/it shows its pleasure some other way? Chirps? Or mandible clicking or something?Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-68897272254671466622016-03-20T12:17:52.198-04:002016-03-20T12:17:52.198-04:00Oh no. No. No. Not food and entertainment.
Waitin...Oh no. No. No. Not food and entertainment. <br />Waiting for next week.<br />Tweeted.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00859109777005545304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-63233894940892932982016-03-20T11:19:41.803-04:002016-03-20T11:19:41.803-04:00Uh oh. She's got figure out to get out of this...Uh oh. She's got figure out to get out of this pretty fast.<br />Tweeted.Daryl Devoréhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00941826725131248565noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-70024173795532864192016-03-20T11:15:05.554-04:002016-03-20T11:15:05.554-04:00Perfect and damn scary. Perfect and damn scary. Charmaine Gordonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15236373312231763983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-11650351111302403992016-03-20T11:04:11.145-04:002016-03-20T11:04:11.145-04:00Ew, I hate the big alien already. Jobo cannot be f...Ew, I hate the big alien already. Jobo cannot be food!!! Great snippet and I believe the punctuation in the dialogue works :-)Sara Harrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10519801029696101409noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-7069014838212950002016-03-20T10:53:18.573-04:002016-03-20T10:53:18.573-04:00Eeep! I wouldn't want to be either of those th...Eeep! I wouldn't want to be either of those things. Great snippet, Teresa. :)Siobhan Muirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00595776353171184107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-89958542542139868072016-03-20T10:04:12.963-04:002016-03-20T10:04:12.963-04:00Solid description and atmosphere as ever, Teresa!Solid description and atmosphere as ever, Teresa!Daezarkian13https://www.blogger.com/profile/08839083029518977312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-11951648026931018742016-03-20T09:51:51.656-04:002016-03-20T09:51:51.656-04:00Yikes! That is not good at all. I want to keep rea...Yikes! That is not good at all. I want to keep reading, as I'm hoping something gets her and Jobe out of that situation.Jessica E. Subjecthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14356934162311768234noreply@blogger.com