tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post4682613577023072265..comments2024-03-10T05:18:37.521-04:00Comments on Stories From A Starry Sky: Weekend Writing Warriors March 16, 2014Teresa Cypherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comBlogger48125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-53677898916570509212014-03-22T14:30:31.487-04:002014-03-22T14:30:31.487-04:00Thanks, Linda. I'm so glad the words (so far) ...Thanks, Linda. I'm so glad the words (so far) make you wonder. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-30174334031057955282014-03-22T14:29:44.549-04:002014-03-22T14:29:44.549-04:00It sure can be trying! Sometimes I rearrange word ...It sure can be trying! Sometimes I rearrange word order and word choice so many times, a sentence completely loses meaning for me. Then it's time to step away. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-19242570742163094322014-03-22T14:27:50.490-04:002014-03-22T14:27:50.490-04:00Thanks, Sue! I hope life is righting itself for yo...Thanks, Sue! I hope life is righting itself for you! Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-32489975596406781162014-03-22T10:35:20.750-04:002014-03-22T10:35:20.750-04:00I dunno...it's funny how we all haven't di...I dunno...it's funny how we all haven't different associations with words...that's why damn word choice can be so trying. But, I just wanted you to know I had no problem with the visualization...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-45142520144005324502014-03-19T01:36:22.482-04:002014-03-19T01:36:22.482-04:00I'm wondering where they are going.I'm wondering where they are going. Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13346034896296813841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-64649543075647535192014-03-18T22:33:40.317-04:002014-03-18T22:33:40.317-04:00I can tell you love your character (as you should)...I can tell you love your character (as you should)<br />I've had a hell of a few days hence am so late to the party. <br /><br />I've read the comments and have nothing to add. It left me with questions: who are they, why are they here, what do they want <br /><br />and as we know questions are good - cause the reader keeps looking for the answers!suehttp://sassyspeaks.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-65315575159379867472014-03-17T16:36:01.852-04:002014-03-17T16:36:01.852-04:00! Thanks, Cynthia. :-) Editing is such a bear... ...! Thanks, Cynthia. :-) Editing is such a bear... Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-81097810987729857212014-03-17T14:18:26.417-04:002014-03-17T14:18:26.417-04:00The Gunslinger and the character Roland by Stephen...The Gunslinger and the character Roland by Stephen King immediately came to mind along with a vision of a deserted ghost town with a door to another world..."There are other worlds than these"... A terrific snippet that makes me want to read more!!Cynthia Hudson Keanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16664430309647989880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-26992125007391266262014-03-17T14:04:38.920-04:002014-03-17T14:04:38.920-04:00Hmm, that is exactly how I meant it, Millie. Thank...Hmm, that is exactly how I meant it, Millie. Thank you. I wonder how many people think differently? Maybe I should better describe what they're wearing? Thanks for visiting!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-38061500514443489992014-03-17T14:03:29.642-04:002014-03-17T14:03:29.642-04:00Lol...well, Kad knows both sides. Sometimes he use...Lol...well, Kad knows both sides. Sometimes he uses vinegar, sometimes he uses honey. :-) Thanks for visiting, Caitlin!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-72605241665475591822014-03-17T02:17:13.731-04:002014-03-17T02:17:13.731-04:00FYI, I didn't think anything odd about the use...FYI, I didn't think anything odd about the use of coat tails. I envisioned heavy duster jackets or some sort of shorter trench coat that was being whipped around by the wind...not a tux ; )Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-15484753816802494262014-03-17T01:50:10.597-04:002014-03-17T01:50:10.597-04:00Well, that's a little rude. Doesn't he kno...Well, that's a little rude. Doesn't he know that being polite goes a long way?<br /><br />I guess he's too civilized to be polite. :PAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-54174360543622013302014-03-17T01:15:50.397-04:002014-03-17T01:15:50.397-04:00Thanks, Carrie-Anne. It's definitely a work in...Thanks, Carrie-Anne. It's definitely a work in progress. Many changes ahead, I'm sure ;-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-68625320546949323972014-03-16T23:15:49.661-04:002014-03-16T23:15:49.661-04:00I like the description you painted of their world....I like the description you painted of their world. I agree, it seems much different from the previous snippets.Carrie-Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05810154378449825641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-52622489679296325502014-03-16T21:34:20.135-04:002014-03-16T21:34:20.135-04:00Thanks, Karen. It's coming. I'll be excerp...Thanks, Karen. It's coming. I'll be excerpting this one for quite a while. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-17175508789949019442014-03-16T20:15:11.017-04:002014-03-16T20:15:11.017-04:00Nice visual into your world. Enjoyed the snippet a...Nice visual into your world. Enjoyed the snippet and love to know more. Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-36806961318419239292014-03-16T19:39:58.986-04:002014-03-16T19:39:58.986-04:00Food for thought, Veronica. I think I might have t...Food for thought, Veronica. I think I might have to cut to DomCen earlier than I've currently written it, so that the reader can see how archaic certain aspects of their lifestyle is, and learn why. Thanks! :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-88185137272988694232014-03-16T19:38:17.537-04:002014-03-16T19:38:17.537-04:00Seriously considering your comment, Elyzabeth. I d...Seriously considering your comment, Elyzabeth. I don't want the reader to be lost. I might have to rework the first chapter, or prologue as it may be. :-) Thank you !Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-28731366522421080782014-03-16T19:35:43.544-04:002014-03-16T19:35:43.544-04:00Good catch, Kate. Gave it a glancing change. Hope ...Good catch, Kate. Gave it a glancing change. Hope it's enough. :-) Thank you! :-)<br />Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-49071496376271884772014-03-16T19:24:52.618-04:002014-03-16T19:24:52.618-04:00I still feel as if these are two total different s...I still feel as if these are two total different stories. I like this one better but I'm pretty science fiction-minded LOL. Great excerpt, could really picture the scene.Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-17690228443999844992014-03-16T19:05:08.144-04:002014-03-16T19:05:08.144-04:00Thanks, Siobhan. :-)Thanks, Siobhan. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-6958942725513467642014-03-16T18:24:27.253-04:002014-03-16T18:24:27.253-04:00I'm surprised! I didn't expect any interpl...I'm surprised! I didn't expect any interplanetary travel. Like someone else mentioned, I thought the story took place in the past. Definitely curious to know more and to discover the relationship between these characters and the ones previously introduced. Great snippet, Teresa!Elyzabeth M. VaLeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00261951650310680514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-57841982931740299882014-03-16T18:03:32.648-04:002014-03-16T18:03:32.648-04:00Nice descriptions. Great snippet.
One minor quibbl...Nice descriptions. Great snippet.<br />One minor quibble. It appears we're in Kad's POV. He wouldn't think of himself as "easily the tallest of the three." Only show us what he thinks or sees.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-9081830270190291882014-03-16T17:38:47.615-04:002014-03-16T17:38:47.615-04:00Great world-building in so few words, Teresa. :)Great world-building in so few words, Teresa. :)Siobhan Muirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00595776353171184107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-56625618870120927132014-03-16T16:56:49.023-04:002014-03-16T16:56:49.023-04:00Thanks, Elaine! Good to see you :-)Thanks, Elaine! Good to see you :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.com