tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post8522898372862576270..comments2024-03-10T05:18:37.521-04:00Comments on Stories From A Starry Sky: Six Sentence Sunday April 29, 2012Teresa Cypherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-3662665410892784392012-04-29T22:09:04.672-04:002012-04-29T22:09:04.672-04:00Thanks, Jessica. lol..that was unintentional. Bu...Thanks, Jessica. lol..that was unintentional. But...now that you mention it, it works! :-) Thanks for visiting :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-39178682394714331922012-04-29T22:08:16.800-04:002012-04-29T22:08:16.800-04:00Thank you, Elaine. Whew...I hoped that it didn...Thank you, Elaine. Whew...I hoped that it didn't sound contrived :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-82311185369646082132012-04-29T22:07:47.398-04:002012-04-29T22:07:47.398-04:00Hi Lorraine! Thanks you. I could only judge by...Hi Lorraine! Thanks you. I could only judge by how I would feel reading a book in a sort of backwoods dialect. I couldn't read a lot of it :-) Thanks for visiting :-) !Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-7687182256444093732012-04-29T22:06:33.128-04:002012-04-29T22:06:33.128-04:00Thank you, Ann :-)Thank you, Ann :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-13677786576291979452012-04-29T20:47:36.810-04:002012-04-29T20:47:36.810-04:00The dialect is explained later in the six, so I th...The dialect is explained later in the six, so I think it all works nicely. :)Jessica E. Subjecthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14356934162311768234noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-54396137057893407702012-04-29T18:20:56.587-04:002012-04-29T18:20:56.587-04:00I like the dialect. Sounds very authentic.I like the dialect. Sounds very authentic.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-57531296235455980422012-04-29T17:11:55.346-04:002012-04-29T17:11:55.346-04:00I like the dialect to add a bit of variety and atm...I like the dialect to add a bit of variety and atmosphere. That said, you are smart to use it sparingly. The last line had me intrigued and now I know why the alcohol is important (I read your other responses). :) Can't wait to see what happens next.patonlorrainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04312527117343841653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-63726161870870695702012-04-29T16:07:43.401-04:002012-04-29T16:07:43.401-04:00No, I like the dialect. I thought you did it very ...No, I like the dialect. I thought you did it very well...Ann Swannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08826695313958091226noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-14098662822892946402012-04-29T15:56:34.628-04:002012-04-29T15:56:34.628-04:00haha! Lily...lolol...wrong bar scene. There are se...haha! Lily...lolol...wrong bar scene. There are several in the book ,and each is steeped in local dialect mingled with drunken blathering :-) Thanks for giving this a read. One more A to Z post! :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-56760785765660885472012-04-29T15:53:22.701-04:002012-04-29T15:53:22.701-04:00Cool that you noticed that, Sarah. It is a plot d...Cool that you noticed that, Sarah. It is a plot detail that identifies his kind. Their innate intolerance of alcohol :-) Thanks for visiting :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-37838461683787493062012-04-29T15:32:24.746-04:002012-04-29T15:32:24.746-04:00The faked dialect and the reassurance brought by d...The faked dialect and the reassurance brought by drinking hard liquor- that was very entertaining. I fear the phrase 'warshing it down' should go, to keep the dialogue believable, but I enjoyed reading it. I wanted him to say 'varmint' too- so maybe it was a bit distracting, but not in a bad way! The secrecy angle was strong- not overplayed- made me curious :-)Lisa Southardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09711376747848601409noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-57710313359779053762012-04-29T15:23:54.284-04:002012-04-29T15:23:54.284-04:00I like that the barkeeper was reassured that the &...I like that the barkeeper was reassured that the 'shadowed man' was drinking. Though I expect demons toss back a few as often as they can . . . <br /><br />The dialect isn't overpowering to me--and it helps to know that this isn't going to be the norm for the speaker (right?).Sarah Whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13265589529909793312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-21691115576655592202012-04-29T14:56:31.898-04:002012-04-29T14:56:31.898-04:00Thanks, Karyn. I was trying for secrecy :-) ! Than...Thanks, Karyn. I was trying for secrecy :-) ! Thanks for stopping :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-51369458733109108472012-04-29T14:55:31.190-04:002012-04-29T14:55:31.190-04:00Thanks, Wildcat's wife! I thought so, too. :-)...Thanks, Wildcat's wife! I thought so, too. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-37955860551638598202012-04-29T14:33:23.898-04:002012-04-29T14:33:23.898-04:00Love the air of secrecy and the mood of the snippe...Love the air of secrecy and the mood of the snippet. Great six!Karyn Goodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12586701849461714531noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-83416491302399006822012-04-29T14:07:39.366-04:002012-04-29T14:07:39.366-04:00Your barkeep is smart to keep his eye on all myste...Your barkeep is smart to keep his eye on all mysterious shadows lurking in his joint. Good six!WIldcats Wifehttp://www.wildcatswife.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-62458586325699348172012-04-29T13:50:18.212-04:002012-04-29T13:50:18.212-04:00Thanks for sharing your insight, Angela :-) Much a...Thanks for sharing your insight, Angela :-) Much appreciated!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-44218884675568233432012-04-29T13:01:32.692-04:002012-04-29T13:01:32.692-04:00I liked the dialect, works for me-- I also like ho...I liked the dialect, works for me-- I also like how you did a little characterization with it, showing how adaptable and savvy Kad is...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-88643781985810915922012-04-29T10:35:06.243-04:002012-04-29T10:35:06.243-04:00Hi Marsha...yes, lol, now I see how redundant that...Hi Marsha...yes, lol, now I see how redundant that is! I think "warsh it down" must go. There is enough additional dialectal language in this scene to carry it. Thank you for visiting, and pointing that out. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-83204369659205167832012-04-29T10:27:53.868-04:002012-04-29T10:27:53.868-04:00Thanks, Kate! :-)Thanks, Kate! :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-330509418044537022012-04-29T10:05:14.547-04:002012-04-29T10:05:14.547-04:00Hi! I particularly like your last sentence. Some d...Hi! I particularly like your last sentence. Some dialect helps me feel like I really am somewhere else, not just a little unknown Earth town. If I may suggest, I think adding "to warsh it down" might not be needed, since by definition that's what a chaser is for. But you could leave out "chaser" to keep the bit of dialect. I'll be back next week :) ~Marcia/OwlladyOwlladyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12989152304836466124noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-34926754261147378892012-04-29T09:44:47.298-04:002012-04-29T09:44:47.298-04:00I think the local dialect adds to the setting beau...I think the local dialect adds to the setting beautifully. Well done, Teresa!Katehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10261759171411084998noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-71933225798240145612012-04-29T09:13:26.278-04:002012-04-29T09:13:26.278-04:00Hi Dana! Thanks! I love that you found your new ...Hi Dana! Thanks! I love that you found your new dictionary! "Chaser" and "wingman"-- very cool that it includes those words. :-)<br /><br />I like having a wingman :-) Thanks for visiting. Now heading to check out your and Jess's posts. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-53195377467477381702012-04-29T09:10:42.416-04:002012-04-29T09:10:42.416-04:00:-) Hi Jess. Now that you pointed it out, I see ...:-) Hi Jess. Now that you pointed it out, I see how awkward it does feel. Good suggestions for a fix. I'll work on it before moving on. Thank you! :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-62877954018702620972012-04-29T05:46:45.742-04:002012-04-29T05:46:45.742-04:00I like very much the idea, that blending in a cult...I like very much the idea, that blending in a cultural setting - not hiding from it - goes along with removing suspicion. Those guys are pros!<br />Teresa, those are great, they feel like more than six lines information-content wise, and what a wonderful prelude to my Sunday they are! <br /><br />P.S. I am happy to have found a dictionary with a bit of urban tilt, it even covered the word chaser. It is quite self-explanatory, now that I think about it. :)<br /><br />P.P.S. Thank you so much for your support! You are my wingman!! Yes, I looked that up, too. :)DasNukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06513945470399592454noreply@blogger.com