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Sunday, May 16, 2021

WeWriWa: EU73


 


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This snippet is from Emmily, Unbound, an SFR story. Emmily is on a supply run, and Adren (the youngest looking alien) is with her this time. General has once again kept Murphy at the cabin under threat of harm if Emmily tries to get away. Adren is sharing with Emmily one of their methods of controlling her.

Last week ended with: “You operate on a norm of ‘do no harm to others’. Based on that, we believe you are highly motivated to not allow innocent bystanders to be hurt or worse, when  you can prevent it by following Genrael's rules.”  

The Snippet:           

     I can’t contain my emotion. Here comes that severe stress reaction. I grin like the village idiot as warm tears stream down my face. “Jesus Christ,” I mumble. “What other surprises do you have in store for me?” 

     His voice is softer now when he says, “We will sit here and wait until you are rational again. Then we will go into the store and get the items on your list. No one will get hurt, Emmily, because you are a good person.” 

      I try to give him my meanest look, working hard to narrow my eyes and lower my brows.

A few more lines to finish his reply: 

I draw back my lips, attempting a fierce display of...of what? I have no idea what the hell I’m doing right now. I might be losing my tether to reality. Their assessment of my sanity is way off. I bring my hands up to my face and wipe my eyes. 

    
I'd probably have moments that I'd think I was losing it, too. You?

I look up and see that number 73 in my title. The way I'm going, the entire book might be published on Blogger. I walked away from this manuscript for a month (other than a wewriwa post or two). I think I've gone through a dozen different ways to feel insecure about it. I'm back chugging away at it again. 

That's it for this week. Thank you so much for visiting and for reading. :-)

 

14 comments:

  1. In that situation, I'd have a hard time staying sane, too. Enjoying this story! Keep going!

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  2. Keep plugging along! My last year and this have gone the same way. No distracts and endless time so there's no pressure to accomplish anything. But you're here and Emmily rocks this scene!!

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    1. Thank you for your encouraging words, Nancy. You are an inspiration! :-)

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  3. I'd probably be losing it a bit too in this situation.

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    1. Thanks, Fallon. She has to find a balance she can live with. It comes, then it goes. ;-) Then it comes back again.

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  4. She seems very human in her reactions to me, so good job! Great snippet...

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  5. So this is one of those situations where being a good person sounds like a character flaw, but I'm sure it will help her prevail in the end. Very glad you returned to this book!

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  6. I wish that my moments of insecurity didn't tend to come with a heaping helping of self-loathing. It's a bad pattern that I fell into long ago and I don't know if I'll ever be completely free of it. Whenever things go wrong with my writing process or schedule in any way, I tend to tell myself that I'm trash, my writing is trash, and I might as well just delete everything.
    I'm still recovering from the fiasco created for me by Amazon last month. I'm now having to play catch-up by finishing two Cloned Heat shorts in a month rather than just one. Sigh.

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  7. really good scene. Everyone else commented pretty much what i wanted to say.
    Tweeted.

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  8. The uncertainty she feels gives this snippet a very welcome depth and resonance. Both of the characters in the scene -- and general, to0 -- are characterized very nicely.

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  9. I think she's doing great under the circumstances. This is an unusual situation after all.

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  10. I feel like the only way her sanity is going to stick around is if they leave, and even then, she's going to need a TON of therapy to process everything that's happened to her. Hopefully when the aliens finally leave they somehow compensate her financially for all her pain and suffering!

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  11. So interesting that they understand her character so well they can use this as a tactic to control her. Great way to show their intellect and her vulnerability!

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