tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post2931312427087910737..comments2024-03-10T05:18:37.521-04:00Comments on Stories From A Starry Sky: Weekend Writing Warriors: May 31, 2015Teresa Cypherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comBlogger54125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-1410120033650752642015-06-05T10:20:58.826-04:002015-06-05T10:20:58.826-04:00Thanks, JT :-)Thanks, JT :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-677789532126491452015-06-03T22:23:32.762-04:002015-06-03T22:23:32.762-04:00Nicely paced scene. The tension is palpable.Nicely paced scene. The tension is palpable.JTsuruokahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05173187123835069767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-51331220120302002942015-06-03T09:04:53.970-04:002015-06-03T09:04:53.970-04:00Abraxum is a great character. He's a tortured ...Abraxum is a great character. He's a tortured soul living with deep regrets carried from his younger days. That's the reason he chose to stay single--and enter the King's guard. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-49655139858437925482015-06-03T09:02:33.184-04:002015-06-03T09:02:33.184-04:00One of the problems with sharing short snippets, E...One of the problems with sharing short snippets, Eden. :-) It's tough to grip context. Thanks for visiting! :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-38381195376784614612015-06-03T09:01:24.838-04:002015-06-03T09:01:24.838-04:00Thanks, Cecilia!Thanks, Cecilia!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-64655426159582233742015-06-02T13:00:18.520-04:002015-06-02T13:00:18.520-04:00I like how he's keeping his cool and grace und...I like how he's keeping his cool and grace under a lot of pressure. Panicking under such circumstances would be the last thing anyone needs.Carrie-Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05810154378449825641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-78817520274940043192015-06-01T22:02:59.385-04:002015-06-01T22:02:59.385-04:00The last line was good. Thing is, rereading last ...The last line was good. Thing is, rereading last week's snippet with this one, I didn't get the impression that they were on a command deck of a battle/space-ship until this piece. It caught me at unawares (enough to make me go back and recheck last week's snippet). Still love how his people are trying so hard to stay in control of themselves despite their inexperience.Eden "Kymele" Mabeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01550337993392791643noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-70902357388565854542015-05-31T23:46:58.783-04:002015-05-31T23:46:58.783-04:00Loved that last line. I want more.Loved that last line. I want more.Ceciliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07076648307785084672noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-46027459497053976782015-05-31T22:40:55.880-04:002015-05-31T22:40:55.880-04:00:-) Complications are on the way. :-) Thanks for v...:-) Complications are on the way. :-) Thanks for visiting, Victoria!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-64752348606038887952015-05-31T22:39:27.431-04:002015-05-31T22:39:27.431-04:00Good advice, Caitlin. Thank you! :-) Yep. I did d...Good advice, Caitlin. Thank you! :-) Yep. I did do some tinkering with punctuation for sentence count.Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-57471603502133341762015-05-31T22:38:38.377-04:002015-05-31T22:38:38.377-04:00Ah - things are about to get complicated" -if...Ah - things are about to get complicated" -if the enemy won't even hide.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00859109777005545304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-28526801344555514392015-05-31T20:07:51.849-04:002015-05-31T20:07:51.849-04:00Uh-oh! Something wicked this way comes...
This ma...Uh-oh! Something wicked this way comes...<br /><br />This may be from making the sentence count, but I think the dialogue might work better as:<br />"Switch spectrums. Look for activity, for weapons arming. Don’t be afraid to push the engines."<br />Short choppy commands, to show the tension.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-14273333010882884802015-05-31T20:02:40.864-04:002015-05-31T20:02:40.864-04:00It does speak volumes about who is behind them. :-...It does speak volumes about who is behind them. :-) Thanks for visiting, Dani!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-43205535939895240772015-05-31T20:02:06.121-04:002015-05-31T20:02:06.121-04:00~grinning like a fool~ Thanks, Steven!~grinning like a fool~ Thanks, Steven!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-21210379784745405622015-05-31T20:01:41.635-04:002015-05-31T20:01:41.635-04:00:-) Stay tuned. Thanks, Frank! :-) Stay tuned. Thanks, Frank! Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-40165264221258763172015-05-31T20:01:17.193-04:002015-05-31T20:01:17.193-04:00Actually, one ship is crippled and is now incapabl...Actually, one ship is crippled and is now incapable of hiding. The other isn't hiding. ~whispering~ they aren't enemies coming in from behind. :-) Thanks for visiting, Aurora! Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-56190324188187604962015-05-31T20:00:10.157-04:002015-05-31T20:00:10.157-04:00Well trained. It's just taking time. And Kuylr...Well trained. It's just taking time. And Kuylrh is injured. :-) Thanks for visiting!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-33417685268454091432015-05-31T19:57:35.688-04:002015-05-31T19:57:35.688-04:00Dhurstan...now he's a real piece of work. He w...Dhurstan...now he's a real piece of work. He was soooooo much fun to write. :-) Thanks for visiting, Christina!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-70042114693140355112015-05-31T19:56:42.138-04:002015-05-31T19:56:42.138-04:00They might be complicit in an accidental way with ...They might be complicit in an accidental way with the young King's abduction. :-) Thanks for visiting, Sara!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-73797565017053531072015-05-31T19:55:50.622-04:002015-05-31T19:55:50.622-04:00They are, Charmaine! :-) Thank you!They are, Charmaine! :-) Thank you!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-59660431842581491452015-05-31T19:55:26.263-04:002015-05-31T19:55:26.263-04:00A catalyst for crossed-star lovers to meet, perhap...A catalyst for crossed-star lovers to meet, perhaps... Thanks for visiting, Alexis!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-64657770842012150322015-05-31T19:54:34.247-04:002015-05-31T19:54:34.247-04:00:-) I love scifi. This story is romance with scifi...:-) I love scifi. This story is romance with scifi elements. I didn't even think about it until a couple of weeks ago when a facebook writers' group had a discussion about it. Thanks for visiting, Michelle!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-65409126295479064162015-05-31T19:52:55.277-04:002015-05-31T19:52:55.277-04:00There is ongoing trouble, Ed. It lies ahead of Abr...There is ongoing trouble, Ed. It lies ahead of Abraxum and his crew. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-11597844082814382102015-05-31T19:52:14.248-04:002015-05-31T19:52:14.248-04:00:-) Elaine, you are perceptive! It might not be an...:-) Elaine, you are perceptive! It might not be an enemy... Thanks for visiting. Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-65679579527430388842015-05-31T18:41:24.182-04:002015-05-31T18:41:24.182-04:00They must be either very powerful or friendly if t...They must be either very powerful or friendly if they take no care to hide.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.com