tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post7385868785370098685..comments2024-03-10T05:18:37.521-04:00Comments on Stories From A Starry Sky: EU Blurb attempt #2Teresa Cypherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-50716385260098376822020-09-04T04:05:22.230-04:002020-09-04T04:05:22.230-04:00Great post love to see itGreat post love to see itweight loss exercise at homehttps://www.merakildh.in/2020/08/weight-loss-exercise-at-home.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-65764835088626840842020-09-02T11:54:55.033-04:002020-09-02T11:54:55.033-04:00I know, Cie. I liked it to, but sacrificed it to t...I know, Cie. I liked it to, but sacrificed it to the God of word counts. Thanks!!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-27435936556466459852020-09-02T11:53:24.171-04:002020-09-02T11:53:24.171-04:00I love your suggestion, E.D. I'm trying to mak...I love your suggestion, E.D. I'm trying to make it work. Thank you!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-24920418277117636972020-09-02T11:51:12.333-04:002020-09-02T11:51:12.333-04:00Thanks, Karen!! I'm so glad you think it sound...Thanks, Karen!! I'm so glad you think it sounds good. 😊Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-42768780420621963942020-09-02T11:45:37.654-04:002020-09-02T11:45:37.654-04:00Thanks bunches, Elaine!!Thanks bunches, Elaine!!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-47977371120525272020-09-02T11:45:09.742-04:002020-09-02T11:45:09.742-04:00Thank you so much, Iris!!Thank you so much, Iris!!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-27771452536129426412020-09-02T11:44:37.825-04:002020-09-02T11:44:37.825-04:00Those are good words to read! Thank you so much, A...Those are good words to read! Thank you so much, A.D.!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-40676951625961519562020-09-02T11:43:39.781-04:002020-09-02T11:43:39.781-04:00Thanks, Jessica! I removed it. Totally see your re...Thanks, Jessica! I removed it. Totally see your reasoning. I'm so grateful for your help. 😊Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-37544541692061486432020-09-02T11:28:55.139-04:002020-09-02T11:28:55.139-04:00Thank you, Jenna. It feels off to me. I got rid of...Thank you, Jenna. It feels off to me. I got rid of it. :-) Thanks for all of your help!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-50940892557408883922020-09-02T11:27:28.528-04:002020-09-02T11:27:28.528-04:00Sheesh! Autocorrect!! His name and title... Gen Ra...Sheesh! Autocorrect!! His name and title... Gen Rael.Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-1234644693695710892020-09-02T11:26:17.011-04:002020-09-02T11:26:17.011-04:00Yeah, about his name. She misunderstands how they&...Yeah, about his name. She misunderstands how they're saying it. He is Ben Rael. Title and name. She thinks they're calling him General. The confusion eventually gets straightened out in the story. Thank you so much for all of your help!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-50598302703805326322020-09-02T11:23:26.141-04:002020-09-02T11:23:26.141-04:00Thanks, Alexis! I had no idea how hard they are to...Thanks, Alexis! I had no idea how hard they are to write! 😊Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-36789131187854366472020-09-01T15:00:05.479-04:002020-09-01T15:00:05.479-04:00Thanks, Ian! The warriors told me that I needed so...Thanks, Ian! The warriors told me that I needed something from Rael's perspective. I like. Never gave it a thought before... Still have some work to do. Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-88874649146806924112020-09-01T14:58:27.965-04:002020-09-01T14:58:27.965-04:00Thanks, Nancy. I loved that line. I put it back in...Thanks, Nancy. I loved that line. I put it back in. My husband told me that it sounds like something I'd write--that it sounds like the book, not like a generic sort of advert for the story. I dunno. He's not necessarily my target audience. ;-) But it did get me thinking about how the blurb should be true to the writer's voice. ~sigh~ The more I know the less I know. :-)<br />Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-39139988533860118832020-09-01T14:55:56.401-04:002020-09-01T14:55:56.401-04:00Thanks, Ed. Looks like I'm moving in the right...Thanks, Ed. Looks like I'm moving in the right direction. Still could be better. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-11304612831666965642020-08-31T08:38:34.134-04:002020-08-31T08:38:34.134-04:00The newer version is more concise. I do like the b...The newer version is more concise. I do like the bit about finding her muse and writing her book in the old version, but getting to the point is probably best.Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost https://www.blogger.com/profile/07596105116325246476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-26404648406194717502020-08-31T00:26:34.858-04:002020-08-31T00:26:34.858-04:00Great job with the blurb!
Now, just to throw in a...Great job with the blurb!<br /><br />Now, just to throw in another wrench...many people suggest starting with a one sentence hook, before diving into the blurb itself. Maybe you could take that line from the end that everyone likes? "Her simple plan - never fall in love again - might not be as simple as she thought." Or something like that.E.D. Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06919218250424892502noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-13029121027138652352020-08-30T23:50:57.782-04:002020-08-30T23:50:57.782-04:00Sounds good. I like the revised version. Sounds good. I like the revised version. Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-56493064963618293492020-08-30T21:57:21.807-04:002020-08-30T21:57:21.807-04:00I liked it better.I liked it better.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-81766586808581443832020-08-30T21:23:30.436-04:002020-08-30T21:23:30.436-04:00I like the revised version better, too. I like the revised version better, too. Iris Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07282988971025667976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-79337707495198621542020-08-30T14:04:59.044-04:002020-08-30T14:04:59.044-04:00Definitely crisper, clearer, and much more intrigu...Definitely crisper, clearer, and much more intriguing! I agree with Jenna in that the last line doesn't necessarily have to be there. I like it, but I don't feel it's necessary. I think you get the same message across in the previous paragraph. It just emphasizes the stakes, I guess.Jessica E. Subjecthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14356934162311768234noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-68922499092010393612020-08-30T12:39:12.568-04:002020-08-30T12:39:12.568-04:00I really like the revision! My only question is do...I really like the revision! My only question is do you need that last line? Just sayin'...:)Jennahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10308158251486924808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-48752220678280039072020-08-30T12:35:05.852-04:002020-08-30T12:35:05.852-04:00Seems fine overall. Is he a General or is his name...Seems fine overall. Is he a General or is his name "Gen Rael"? I think that needs to be clarified for the reader...best wishes!Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-49677703252924218422020-08-30T12:32:40.662-04:002020-08-30T12:32:40.662-04:00Great job! Writing blurbs is sooooo hard.Great job! Writing blurbs is sooooo hard.Alexis Duranhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15582838606796213690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-22180398623598813272020-08-30T11:15:49.216-04:002020-08-30T11:15:49.216-04:00Definitely getting there. A lot of tightening up s...Definitely getting there. A lot of tightening up since last week, and I like the interplay with Gen Rael's perspective.Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.com