tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post953049109580561502..comments2024-03-10T05:18:37.521-04:00Comments on Stories From A Starry Sky: Weekend Writing Warriors: August 31, 2014Teresa Cypherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-58165734726920130512014-09-04T10:27:23.429-04:002014-09-04T10:27:23.429-04:00Did they reach where he paid to go? Or is it a clu...Did they reach where he paid to go? Or is it a clue that this time they also won't get there?Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13346034896296813841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-42040412051863534352014-09-03T14:39:22.423-04:002014-09-03T14:39:22.423-04:00I like the country twang in the dialogue and narra...I like the country twang in the dialogue and narration. Moving at a "chin hair" pace put a smile on my face. I like the story being told--makes me think there will be some wisdom or foreshadowing of what's in store for your characters later on in the story.<br /><br />Keep smiling,<br />YawattaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-73814668655434287012014-09-01T20:09:32.744-04:002014-09-01T20:09:32.744-04:00Sounds like a great book! I think this scene sets ...Sounds like a great book! I think this scene sets the tone for a very interesting story.Stephanie Farishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10461865229341760836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-76034606584087077682014-09-01T09:45:38.692-04:002014-09-01T09:45:38.692-04:00There's a reason he chose that particular stor...There's a reason he chose that particular story to tell at that moment...FCEtierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14199098303138353894noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-8066970891669054622014-09-01T01:09:49.617-04:002014-09-01T01:09:49.617-04:00I really like this description 'corrected his ...I really like this description 'corrected his course just a chin hair, then continued.' the 'chin hair' speaks to the character I really it set a tone and evocative!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05037846471256555002noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-56683867387512811992014-08-31T23:59:43.048-04:002014-08-31T23:59:43.048-04:00Love the visual writing. As always you have me the...Love the visual writing. As always you have me there in the moment. Great job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-88224110692988623122014-08-31T21:08:20.401-04:002014-08-31T21:08:20.401-04:00I don't think there's going to be a positi...I don't think there's going to be a positive ending to this story! At least the driver came out of it alive.Carrie-Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05810154378449825641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-26188072990763455282014-08-31T18:22:29.103-04:002014-08-31T18:22:29.103-04:00You've created a fantastic storyteller, Teresa...You've created a fantastic storyteller, Teresa! <br /><br />Guess it takes one to write one. ;)Sarah Whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13265589529909793312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-18967547026116622632014-08-31T17:24:43.700-04:002014-08-31T17:24:43.700-04:00Never heard of a "chin hair" as a unit o...Never heard of a "chin hair" as a unit of measure ;) It's quite fitting though, and I'm interested to know the rest of the story. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16962606252287502975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-79074665278330913112014-08-31T16:48:37.330-04:002014-08-31T16:48:37.330-04:00I love this line so much: "...long before I’d...I love this line so much: "...long before I’d gotten the ideas of right and wrong honed to a humble shine." Love it!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12742618211008888625noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-37940794083921079412014-08-31T16:14:30.162-04:002014-08-31T16:14:30.162-04:00It sure does work because I can't wait to hear...It sure does work because I can't wait to hear the rest of the story ! :-)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09922888671399516573noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-31631167045471837852014-08-31T15:27:06.230-04:002014-08-31T15:27:06.230-04:00I think everything works. I love the way he begins...I think everything works. I love the way he begins his story, and the part about before his hair was gray is genius.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-25489842987276879772014-08-31T15:07:28.298-04:002014-08-31T15:07:28.298-04:00Ah, the battle between common sense and the invinc...Ah, the battle between common sense and the invincibility of youth.Sue Ann Bowlinghttp://homecomingbook.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-19282739885227768062014-08-31T15:03:23.543-04:002014-08-31T15:03:23.543-04:00More. Tell us more as we gather 'round the fir...More. Tell us more as we gather 'round the fire and listen. Thanks for the treat, Teresa.Charmaine Gordonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15236373312231763983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-15894775529778095442014-08-31T14:30:56.696-04:002014-08-31T14:30:56.696-04:00Ooh, enticing beginning to his story. I like the c...Ooh, enticing beginning to his story. I like the character's "voice" and all his phrases. (He should have his own novella at least LOL!) Really a great excerpt!Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-86729710974353788002014-08-31T13:12:07.026-04:002014-08-31T13:12:07.026-04:00I just pre-ordered this. I am so ready for the nex...I just pre-ordered this. I am so ready for the next story in your Reaper series. Great snippet. Gem Sivadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01233835029255570402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-11190813931187659102014-08-31T13:07:54.427-04:002014-08-31T13:07:54.427-04:00I really like Wiley's "voice" in thi...I really like Wiley's "voice" in this snippet. I can picture him telling his story and love his "sense of right and wrong honed to a humble shine". Your characters are rich and distinct. Gem Sivadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01233835029255570402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-80868585668953116702014-08-31T12:10:01.113-04:002014-08-31T12:10:01.113-04:00Uh-oh. I can hear the foreshadowing in his words j...Uh-oh. I can hear the foreshadowing in his words just from that snippet. Great job, Teresa. :)<br />And your map says I'm visiting from Gillette, WY. Not quite, but closer than, say, Montana. ;)Siobhan Muirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00595776353171184107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-1894876626870591322014-08-31T12:09:20.248-04:002014-08-31T12:09:20.248-04:00I wonder how his passengers feel about hearing how...I wonder how his passengers feel about hearing how their boat pilot screwed up. Kind of like watching a plane crash movie while on a plane. Seriously though I do enjoy Wiley and love how you tell us about this world through him. I'll enjoy his story because I'm not sitting in his boat, though it feels like it sometimes.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-85220116137161910762014-08-31T11:51:08.578-04:002014-08-31T11:51:08.578-04:00As always, I love your dialogue here! Nice 8.As always, I love your dialogue here! Nice 8.Lashell Collinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00085689719060672458noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-81238372042813614862014-08-31T11:50:56.817-04:002014-08-31T11:50:56.817-04:00Love, love Wiley! He is a vivid character. I can s...Love, love Wiley! He is a vivid character. I can see and hear him so clearly! Can't wait to hear the rest of his tale. Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-16137237138637380782014-08-31T11:36:03.770-04:002014-08-31T11:36:03.770-04:00I love Wiley's voice. I can so hear him in my...I love Wiley's voice. I can so hear him in my head. And I hope his message isn't lost on his audience. Great 8!Jennahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10308158251486924808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-50953867747421989532014-08-31T11:12:29.883-04:002014-08-31T11:12:29.883-04:00Oh we've got something intriguing here :-) Gre...Oh we've got something intriguing here :-) Great way to set up some tension in Wiley's tale. That's a character who won't need much tweaking in later drafts, for sure.<br /><br />I'm kind of wondering about that "eyes glued" bit. To me, that often comes off as a cliche. Your style is usually more creative than that so this stands out. I know this is an early draft and you might plan to revisit that later, but wanted to mention it.<br /><br />Can't wait to find out what happened on that early trip of his!Marciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07092928480361131154noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-61183891208645445032014-08-31T09:55:31.685-04:002014-08-31T09:55:31.685-04:00I sure do love Wiley. He just pops off the page e...I sure do love Wiley. He just pops off the page every week, larger than life!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4696914224277711875.post-57293537259714023722014-08-31T09:54:48.973-04:002014-08-31T09:54:48.973-04:00Ah, I have the impression his first voyage didn...Ah, I have the impression his first voyage didn't go all that well. Love Wiley's voice Looking forward to more! Elyzabeth M. VaLeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00261951650310680514noreply@blogger.com