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Saturday, April 23, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors April 24, 2016


Hello all my fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) 

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE



Setup:  Earth has been invaded by aliens. Our MC, Lily, and her dog, Jobe, were captured.
      Lily is on the ground with her wrists and ankles secured. It is dawn, and the alien commander and Lily just locked eyes. She demanded to know why.Last week's snippet ended with this:

"One scaly eyebrow went up, and his smile faded. “Your kind does not take pleasure in business?”
We continue from there:

“I’m done talking to you.”

His deep sigh of impatience was so human-like it sent shudders through her. “Talk to me,” he demanded. 
She looked toward the sunrise and remained silent, feigning indifference.

“Talk to me. Beg me for your dog’s life.”

She spun around and leveled her eyes at him. Her anger, only just ignited, raged through her like an inferno. “Why would you spare my dog’s life? And while I’m at it, why would you spare mine?”




  That's it. I am so sorry I didn't get around to everyone who so kindly left comments on my post last week. Life became unexpectedly hectic. I will do better this week. :-)

Have a great week!

66 comments:

  1. Wow, Lily is tough, and her anger is building. I wonder what that will lead to. Great snippet!

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    1. She has a tough road ahead of her. Thanks for visiting, Jessica!

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  2. Interesting. It starts to sound like he needs something from her, else why be so insistent?

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    1. Or he's just that twisted. :-) Thanks, Ian!

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  3. Isn't he a clever one to mention the one thing that would bring her attention back to him. Nicely done. :)

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    1. Yes, indeed, Heather. :-) Thank you. :-)

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  4. Yes, I want to know why he hasn't ended her life and her little dog too. What oh what could be the answer. I'm enjoying the story. :)

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    1. Answer coming right up, Karen. Thanks!

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  5. What used to look hopeless now has a ray of hope for her survival -- and, more importantly, the dog's. ;-)

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    1. Yessiree. I really want the dog live. I hope my characters agree. :-) Thanks!

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  6. Heck yeh the dog better make it! Even Toto made it! Great snippet!

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    1. I am learning a lot from these snippets--that people will root for a dog earlier and longer than they'll root for a human lol Thanks, Elizabeth!

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  7. nice way to show her anger ... i wonder, too, why they're still alive

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  8. Smart of her to figure that out and use it. Hope it's enough to keep them alive!

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    1. Me too. Characters don't always cooperate, huh? ;-) Thanks, Christina!

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  9. Such a scrappy little thing! Great job, Teresa.

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  10. I'm wondering the same thing. Why would he spare them?

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    1. Answer coming soon. :-) Thanks, Fallon.

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  11. Nice to see her standing up the alien, but I have a feeling he hasn't kept them alive out of any noble purpose...this has been fantastic, Teresa!

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    1. You are intuitive, my friend! Thanks, Steven!

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  12. Feisty - challenging the alien. Tweeted.

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  13. I love her spunk, and I can totally understand it. If you're sure you're going to die, why not at least do it with dignity? As for the dog, you know what they say--everybody else can die but the dog BETTER make it! ;-) Great snippet!

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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    1. lolol! Jobe certainly has his friends among the wewriwa gang! Thanks, Joyce. :-)

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  14. She's got a point. And if he does kill the dog, then he's got nothing to bargain with if he wants her to do something. Still, it takes guts to play that game when your opponent is holding all the cards. Great scene!

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  15. She's tough but she's fighting for her life.
    The scene is impressive.

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    1. Thanks, Charmaine! :-) Hugs to you. :-)

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  16. I find it intriguing that he would want her to beg.

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    1. He's got the soul of a professional torturer. :-) Thanks, Cara.

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  17. This is an interesting turn, and I seriously doubt he has the upper hand that he thinks she does. She's one tough cookie, and I love her for it!

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    1. She is tough. It'll help keep her alive. Thanks, Amy!

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  18. Tense. Wonder if they think she knows where Damen is?

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    1. :-) I' never sure of what the characters are thinking. ;-) Thanks for visiting, Dani!

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  19. Really enjoying this story, as I do all of your writing. Fascinating the alien wants her to argue and beg for the dog's life. Hmmm. Terrific snippet!

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  20. A great, tension-filled exchange! Now it's her turn to raise the good points...why would he spare either of them?

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    1. The answer is coming, for at least one of them. Thanks, Rose!

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  21. Hard to be scared and not know exactly how scared you should be. Threatening her dog tells me he's not one of the good guys. :)

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    1. No, he's definitely not one of the good guys. :-) Thanks, Gem!

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  22. I like that her anger has been ignited and that she is fighting back. I think she's right about the dog. He knows that if he kills it then he has lost leverage. Good piece.

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  23. The threat of the silent treatment worked remarkably well. Too bad she couldn't hold to that threat!

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    1. Yeah. She's shooting from the hip. :-) Thanks, Caitlin!

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  24. Love her spunk. A tough heroine. Great job. Tweeted.

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  25. This girl is great! Such defiance. She makes a wonderful heroine.

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    1. Thanks, Elaine. The story certainly tests how tough she really is. :-)

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  26. Good for her! I kind of hope she'll spit in his eye too, LOL! She must be fun to write.

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    1. She is fun to write. Dev Areen is fun to write, too since he' alien and anything goes. Theusand (male MC) is way fun to write. Thanks!

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  27. She definitely has a point there...good snippet!

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  28. Ooh, that is some scene! I could totally visualize the look on her face as she said that. Great snippet!!!

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    1. Neat! I'm glad you could see it! Thanks, Neva!

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  29. Great way of showing her anger. I'm curious as to what the alien really wants.

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    1. Answer coming right up, Paula! Thanks. :-)

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  30. Please tell me he doesn't harm the dog... :( I love the interaction between them. She's very brave.

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    1. Thanks, Elyzabeth! You can never be sure what aliens will do. ;-)

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  31. Oh no the dog. Don't know if I could read the next snippet if he harms the dog. I'm a baby when it comes to that.

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    1. :-) You're safe for the next snippet or two. :-) Thanks, Cecilia!

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  32. No, don't threaten the dog! She's a very tough cookie. I look forward to learning more...

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    1. I'm trying to make the characters behave, but you know how that goes. They have minds of their own. Thanks, Rachel. :-)

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  33. She totally has a point. I don't see why begging when it's already sort of hopeless.

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    1. She does. But she's a firm believer that when all else is gone, there should still be hope. Thanks for visiting, Linda. :-)

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