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solitary writer's heart good.
This week's snippet: Moving ahead in my WIP, jumping many chapters to give you a glimpse of the male MC--a very complex soul. He is alien, capable of reading minds, and Lily has just had an argument with one of his Chays (sort of like monks. They care for him and help with his task on the ship.) The argument was ugly, and Theusand disciplined his Chay upon his return to his quarters. In case you don't recall, this is Lord Sand, and no one may gaze upon his icy blue eyes without first being invited by him to do so. He's just explained where she should walk--relative to him. Please excuse creative punctuation used to stay within guidelines. The last line last week was was, "You will walk only one half step behind, nearly beside me.”
This week's snippet: Moving ahead in my WIP, jumping many chapters to give you a glimpse of the male MC--a very complex soul. He is alien, capable of reading minds, and Lily has just had an argument with one of his Chays (sort of like monks. They care for him and help with his task on the ship.) The argument was ugly, and Theusand disciplined his Chay upon his return to his quarters. In case you don't recall, this is Lord Sand, and no one may gaze upon his icy blue eyes without first being invited by him to do so. He's just explained where she should walk--relative to him. Please excuse creative punctuation used to stay within guidelines. The last line last week was was, "You will walk only one half step behind, nearly beside me.”
Only one half step? Hell, she should
kiss his feet for letting her be danged near his equal. She struggled to keep her rage unspoken. As if it would make any
difference if she managed to stifle the words; he already knew every venomous thought swirling
in her head.
Her husband was nothing like this despicable
excuse for a man. Ever since their wedding day, she and Ben were a fifty-fifty team, raising children,
paying the bills, and in everything else they did. There was never a time he’d
given her reason to think she was less in his eyes. That’d be the day--the
damned day— he’d ever tell her to walk half a step behind him.
She had to get
home, back to him, back to a world that made sense. She wanted to scream.
This scene is not over... That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm
grateful for every bit of feedback you share.
