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Saturday, March 18, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors March 19, 2017







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  It's time for snips and bits of amazing writing by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
                This week's snippet:  Moving ahead in my WIP, jumping many chapters to give you a glimpse of the male MC--a very complex soul. He is alien, capable of reading minds, and Lily has just had an argument with one of his Chays (sort of like monks. They care for him and help with his task on the ship.) The argument was ugly, and Theusand disciplined his Chay upon his return to his quarters. In case you don't recall, this is Lord Sand, and no one may gaze upon his icy blue eyes without first being invited by him to do so.


"Theusand slid his hood back, revealing ice, and then looked at Lily, seeming to study her. His expression was unreadable and terrifying at once.  “Walk with me.” 

Fear overrode Lily’s knee-jerk response to tell him to kiss her Earth ass, too. What did it matter? He'd known it as soon as she'd thought it, and from the look on his face, he didn’t like it one bit. She followed him out the door.

He slowed in the hallway, motioning for her to walk near his side. “You are not a Chay who is vowed to serve me, to be at my beck and call, and to follow at five paces. You will walk only one half step behind, nearly beside me.”

Wow--he is generous, huh? Only a half step behind. Bet she doesn't like that one bit. :-) 
 That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

32 comments:

  1. That's some generosity! They must have a lot of work ahead of them to get to a decent relationship.

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    1. It is. :-) They sure do! Thanks for visiting, Carrie-Anne! :-)

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  2. This relationship is going to be fun to watch, Teresa! His high and Mightiness my just be put in a much lower place.

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    1. Yes, indeed! he has some learning to do... Thanks for visiting, Kim! Good to see you!

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  3. How exciting for him to have an Almost walking companion. I imagine his chilly demeanor leaves him lonely.

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    1. An "Almost walking companion..." lol. Nice! Thanks for visiting, Gem!

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  4. Oh, so generous. ha. yeah, I don't see her liking that much.

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    1. Not at all, Fallon. :-) Thanks for visiting. :-)

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  5. She may have no love for him, but he obviously holds some regard for her to allow her to walk so close to him. An intriguing snippet! :)

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    1. He does, and it'll be the most humbling thing he's ever encountered. :-) Thanks, Jessica!

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  6. He is definitely interested in her. More-tell us more oh mighty wench who leads us into temptation every week.. I got carried away. Hi Teresa.

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    1. lol, Hi Charmaine! :-) Thank you for your kind words. :-)

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  7. Wow - a whole half-a-step, huh? If she was truly not a servant the question of where she should walk wouldn't even enter the conversation :) I like the possibilities in this relationship!

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  8. As he can read her mind, she's going to have to be very careful of what thoughts she allows to pass through. I hope she stands up to him.

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  9. "Nearly beside him" Lol.
    Her mind must be a mystery to him.

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  10. Oh gosh Your Worship, I'm sooo honored! :-) I don't blame Lily for being peeved.

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  11. The dynamics of all this are fascinating...I'm with her, walking half a step behind isn't cool! Great snippet...

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  12. I can't see her putting up with this for very long. Can' wait to see how he deals with her temper.

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  13. Oh gee, how nice of him, just a half step behind. LOL! We'll see what she has to say about that!

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  14. Gotta love how he condescends toward equality!

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    1. He's being a peach, for sure. Thanks, Ed!

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  15. For him I'm sure this is a major concession.

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    1. Ha! He has a few more of them ahead of him. :-) Thanks, Elaine!

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  16. Generous is the key word here... But at least she's still staying awesome!

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  17. I'm intrigued to know more about this alien. I bet she won't like his generosity. lol Great snippet.

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    1. He's complex, and deeply flawed. He really doesn't make a good alien at all when it comes right down to it. :-)Thanks, Karen!

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  18. I could see it all. Nice snippet, Teresa.

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  19. I'll bet she doesn't like it (walking a half step behind) or him. This will make an interesting conflict. Nice job.

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  20. Oh, generous indeed! Too bad he'd know if she "accidentally" stepped on his heels. I'd be tempted to do so.

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