Hello
fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers). Sorry that life has kept me away from regularly participating.
It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented
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This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor" Lily, abducted from Earth from alien slavers, is following Theusand. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship. The last line last week was (referencing gossip) spoken by Theusand (Lord Sand). She was living every terrifying, scifi-dystopian novel she’d ever read.
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor" Lily, abducted from Earth from alien slavers, is following Theusand. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship. The last line last week was (referencing gossip) spoken by Theusand (Lord Sand). She was living every terrifying, scifi-dystopian novel she’d ever read.
Here we go...
The
larger question burned, and since she no longer possessed a private thought,
she went ahead and asked, “All of your life... so you were born the Sand? You didn’t just wake up one day and turn into a fear-inducing
mind-reader?”
“Fear
inducing?”
“You
can’t tell? You don’t sense it?”
“There
might be some fear, but I believe it is mingled with a larger dose of respect, Lily.
People must be controlled, and most accept that.”
She
shuddered. She was living every terrifying, scifi-dystopian novel she’d ever
read.
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