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Saturday, May 13, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors May 14, 2017



Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)!  Happy Mother's Day to all of you who mother something or someone, be they two-legged or four-legged.


  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
                This week's snippet from *name change alert* Dhor'en Sands (it might still change again):  Lily is following Theusand. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time Lily has left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship.  The last line last week was (referencing gossip) spoken by Theusand (Lord Sand).
I have lived with it all of my life because I am a Dhor'en Sand." " 

Here we go...


The larger question burned, and since she no longer possessed a private thought, she went ahead and asked, “All of your life... so you were born the Sand? You  didn’t just wake up one day and turn into a fear-inducing mind-reader?”

“Fear inducing?”
“You can’t tell? You don’t sense it?”
“There might be some fear, but I believe it is mingled with a larger dose of respect, Lily. People must be controlled, and most accept that.”
She shuddered. She was living every terrifying, scifi-dystopian novel she’d ever read.
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17 comments:

  1. "people must be controlled" ? uh no. Glad I don't live in that society. Great snippet.

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  2. Whoa, this is wonderful. Thanks, Teresa.

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  3. Wow, I shuddered as well. I wonder if she will fall under his control, or (hopefully) show him there are other ways to rule. Love it! :)

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  4. Until it's on the cover, the title can change all it wants. :D I wonder if he reads thoughts more than emotions...

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  5. I'd hate if someone could read my thoughts. Thank goodness when I'm mad my hubby can't... Nice snippet.

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  6. I love how calmly he rebuts her very good point - he's definitely not self aware about his powers! Great snippet.

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  7. Oh wow. His statements about control, and how calmly he delivers it, really is chilling!

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  8. This is a really unnerving statement - he talks about controlling people so unemotionally, in the way some people talk about animals as if they have no feelings.*Shivers*

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  9. So, Theusand interprets others' fear as awe? Or is he trying to justify himself?

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  10. Yikes, what an intense snippet. His lack of awareness is terrifying.

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  11. Not so sure about this guy. Controlling people? No emotions? Or doesn't recognize emotions. I want to read more to see how she "trains" him.

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  12. What? People must be controlled? I'm going to say 'no' to that. That last line made me smile, though. :)

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  13. Gah, I love these snippets! :D

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  14. I absolutely love that snippet! Oh my goodness--conflict, character, and intrigue. Very cool.

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  15. Reads like my kinda story! lol. Love it!!!!

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