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Saturday, August 17, 2019

WeWriWa: Sporulators 6

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, where we share snips and bits of amazing tales by talented authors and writers. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished (we like it all) on their own blog to go live by 9:00 AM each Sunday. Then we visit each other and read and comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
      Snippet Sunday group from facebook, not us, but many of our participants do both, is HERE

      This week's snippet is from a short story, 'Sporulators', more dystopian/scifi, than anything I've written to date.    
     Last week's excerpt ended with this: 

""The point I'm trying to make, Klars, is that DESA was depending on the loyalty of people given little consideration.".
 
This is in Eastwold's POV.  Could be wonky punctuation to keep within the #wewriwa guidelines.

Eastwold is still speaking. The snippet:
     
Not given a choice to take a family, not given a choice to stay for ten or even twenty, and then return.  DESA asked for a hell of a lot of commitment, but offered little in the way of compensation.”

Lars’ expression softened. “It will be fine; we used the New Day Method when planning for labor. Those men each took a vow of celibacy, so that made  Greenleyone the life’s mate to each. They were content, and if it were otherwise, young volunteers would not have come forward to replace the aging workers.”

“Yeah. I’m sure. Volunteers, all.  Who wouldn’t volunteer to come to a desert wasteland to live out their days?”
 
 
That's it for this week. Thanks for visiting! I am truly grateful for comments, suggestions, and for you taking the time to read it.  

32 comments:

  1. It does make you wonder why people would choose to volunteer. Nasty-sounding place.

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  2. Thanks for visiting, Teresa. I have changed the title of my post, and have lost the link to the WeWriWa. I don't know if anything can be done about this. I left a note for Diane. Oh, and thanks for your kind encouragement, keep writing 🌹

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    1. I think we have the linky fixed. :-) Thanks for visiting. :-)

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  3. Oh my gosh, scary goings on and what the man has suggested is frightening. Teresa, you are a wonder creating your stories.

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  4. Even if people did volunteer, things always change when they're actually in the situation. It's rare that things run smoothly all the time. Great snippet!

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  5. Yeah, I'm wondering if 'volunteer' isn't the right word.

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  6. Hmmm, I'm getting more and more skeptical of this whole setup. I think Lars is kidding himself...but it sure makes for an engrossing story! Great snippet...

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  7. They sound more like conscripts and I doubt they're happy if it's been longer than they expected.

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    1. Yep. Conscripts is a good way to put it. :-) Thanks, Aurora!

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  8. Only a very committed volunteer would do that! It doesn't sound like a mission most normal people would sign up for.

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  9. And if people are volunteering to go off to a distant, barren planet, they might have a lot of baggage their trying to run away from. Great setup!

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  10. Love the world building and that snarky final line! :D

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  11. That last sarcastic line says it all, doesn't it!

    Great snippet!

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  12. The sarcasm in the last line caught my attention, too. I have to wonder how bad a person's life might be that they'd "volunteer" to go there.

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    1. Or how brainwashed they are. ;-) Thanks, Diane!

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  13. That final line is a zinger! Awesome snippet, my friend!

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  14. Doesn't sound like a place I'd volunteer to live.

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    1. Me either. Strange, when I think that I'm the one who created it. lol

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  15. Makes me curious to why these people signed up to go. What are they running from? I'm intrigued to know more.

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  16. Thank you very much for your encouragement, Teresa. It is for 9 to 11 yr olds, but many grown ups read my books. My book about a Victorian child in the mines - Candle Dark - has a large following of retired miners 😊

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    1. It sounds so good. I'll check out Candle Dark, too. Sounds like something my granddaughter might like!

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