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Saturday, November 23, 2019

Wewriwa: EU6

      Happy Thanksgiving Week in the USA. One of the things I am exceedingly grateful for is all of you wewriwa warriors! Thank you. :-)
     Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, where we share snips and bits of amazing tales by talented authors and writers. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished (we like it all) on their own blog to go live by 9:00 AM each Sunday. Then we visit each other and read and comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
     
Snippet Sunday group from facebook, not us, but many of our participants do both, is HERE 
     This snippet if from  Emmily, Unbound, a contemporary romance with scifi elements. It's in First-person.  
     There could be wonky punctuation to keep within the #wewriwa guidelines. Emmily, the main character has lost pretty much everything in the last twelve months. She and her dog, Murphy, are moving to an old hunting camp her dad and mom willed to her. She's listening to the radio for distraction, and the Deejays have just gone on and on about a possible UFO sighting. 
     This is chapter one. Last week's snippet ended with this:  “The weather balloon story again? But since I’ve never seen a UFO, I honestly have no idea what they look like." 
The snippet: 
They could resemble weather balloons, I guess.” I wink at Murphy. “Or battlecruisers from Star Wars, maybe even flying pink elephants.”
     Murphy answers me with another one of his perfected looks.
     Bits and pieces about government squashing talk of ETs and UFOs vanish into static when I round the next bend—where the headwaters of the Allegheny river have sliced a narrow pass through bare-branched hills.
     The cellphone navigation tells me I have a turn a half-mile ahead. I know this; I mean I knew it was coming up…somewhere…soon. In my defense, years have gone by since I visited up here at the family cabin.  To say that Jason never liked it is a big understatement...and it’s one that leaves me bitter.   
      
 
 That's it for this week. Thanks for visiting! I am truly grateful for comments, suggestions, and for you taking the time to read it.

14 comments:

  1. I like the little hint of background about the ex at the end, and the banter with the dog earns her a place in my heart.

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  2. I agree about the hint of bitterness. She must have loved the place.

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    1. She did, Aurora. She got caught up in a marriage that grew less and less happy, but the changes were incremental. And like so many people, she simply adjusted along with the changes, constantly creating a new normal. Thanks for visiting!

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  3. I hope the cabin will be all that she remembers! I definitely get the feeling for the place from your descriptions of the river, etc. Well done snippet!

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    1. Thanks, Jean! She has plenty of memory-lane strolls at the cabin. :-)

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  4. I don't blame her for being bitter about it.

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  5. You have a lot going on in this snippet -- her thoughts about UFOs, radio facts about UFOs, her feeling about Jason and the cabin.

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  6. I agree with Ed - so many bits of information being revealed seamlessly - and I know that look from a dog, my dog gives me one all the time! :) Lovely snippet - and I went on a boat trip on the Allegheni when I visited the U.S. several years ago. such a beautiful river!

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  7. Love the hint of a backstory, and her take on what the UFO should look like. Great snippet.

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  8. Your main character is beautifully crafted. All the little pieces of her and her life are revealed bit by bit, just as they should be. Great story, Teresa!

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  9. Oh, ho! Jason. Now we know (or can guess) why she's running to the cabin. You are dribbling out info like a leaky hose. lol Better than inundating us with a gush of backstory. Very nice.

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  10. We learn a lot in this excerpt, and it's revealed just perfectly.

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  11. Yeah, I'd be bitter about it, too.

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