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Sunday, March 25, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday for 3-25-12. Snippet from "Aaydan's Tale"

 Six Sentence Sunday for March 25, 2012 linky-list.

In this scene, Brendyn-- the great nephew of Deamante--the sitting ruler of the Dominion, is attending a meeting of  The Delegations. He was given no choice about attending. Deamante claims no children, and Brendyn has become next in line to rule--of which he wants no part.. 



"Unable to focus any longer on Deamante’s hate-filled words, Brendyn’s mind wondered, taking him to a place, and a boyhood friendship formed during his summers on a world that eschewed hatred. The spiritual folks who ran it had stressed tolerance, and saw to fostering a deep understanding within the young summer-visitors.

He pictured the face of Aaydan, and recalled how many times pain had been the expression...the pain of emotions he faced while being taught the reality in the rest of the Dominion.  The teachers had been straightforward with all of the children, and Aaydan knew that the future waiting on him was one of rejection, perhaps even physical threat. 

When looking at Aaydan, Brendyn had only ever seen the face of a friend; there had never been the face of evil.  But evil was the face that Deamante saw when he looked at an Albainn..."

13 comments:

  1. Teresa/TK: Wow, intense six sentences. Thanks very much for sharing. Would be nice to live in a world that stressed tolerance and understanding. :)

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    1. Thank you Joya for stopping by and taking the time to read it. :-) Yes, it would be nice. Hope...when all else is gone.

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  2. Hi Teresa, Thanks for stopping by my blog... so, I thought I'd check out yours! :) Wow, those are a very intriguing six sentences. You have a lot of powerful ideas in this short snippet: evil, threat, hatred, rejection, pain, tolerance, understanding... Sounds like a complex story! :)

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    1. Thanks, Lorraine :-) You know, I never gave a thought to the individual components I managed to work into the text. Odd...how our minds work. I wish I were a literary genius and could be so deliberate. :-)

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  3. Hi! Thanks for visiting my blog. Your excerpt was very intriguing. Raises a lot of questions, and I feel pretty bad for the character, who seems really troubled.

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    2. *sigh* I just had to delete my own comment...for failure to proofread. :-) Here it is again, with the misspelled word corrected ;-)

      Thanks, Shelley. It is hard to pick the six sentences, huh? To isolate six lines of words that have impact--without the rest of the words on the page... decisions...decisions...

      Thank you for visiting!

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  4. Now if that ain't dripping with tension, what is? Very intrigued.

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    1. Thanks, Tanya! Deamante just makes people tense... Life and death hang in the balance of his decisions, proclamations, edicts, demands, and commands...all given under the guise of peace-- by suppression.

      Thanks for giving it a read :-)

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  5. Hi Teresa. Just dropping in to follow as your A to Z co-host. Nice to meet you!

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    1. Hi Matthew, nice to meet you, as well. I just visited your blog--such a generous thing you do. The writing community is full of kindness, peer mentoring, and sharing. Amazing people...

      Thanks for visiting. See you soon. :-)

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  6. I like the way you spell your characters' names. See you for the A to Z Challenge.

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  7. HI Theresa, Thank you--and thanks for taking the time to give it a read. I like to search names for their meanings, especially old names. Sometimes it works, and one will jump out at me. Then I know it's right. Sometimes not. But, that is part of the fun of it.

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