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Saturday, November 17, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday: November 18, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday is a bloghop--and one of the friendliest. Participants post six sentences of their writing, then the fun begins. Readers hop from blog to blog, sharing opinions, critiques and encouragement.  We know what a solitary pursuit writing can be--and Six Sentence Sunday is a great way to meet other writers, and take a break from our solitude. Complete rules and a sign up form are at the site here.

Returning to my WIP, ATNS.  A snippet from a dream sequence. Dhurstan Of Rialt, friend of Cuylrh since childhood, is half drunk and on a tirade about the woman (main character, Marissa) from a world called Earth, who is bringing his best friend to his knees.  This scene happens shortly after Marissa rejected Cuylrh's overtures. This is in Cuylrh's POV.


“You should dump her off at the next station, or better yet, just leave her here when we go.  What good is she?"  He pointed the direction of the lake, his body swaying and spit flying from his mouth as he raged. "She doesn’t cook, she won't wash our clothes, and the worst thing of all is that her body isn’t doing anything to satisfy even a one of us. Giver above! She should at least be trying to satisfy us...all of us; she’s no different than any other woman we’ve shared on this journey!”

Ain't this guy a peach?  There might be more to Dhurstan's motivation than the best interest of his friend.

Let me have it. :-) Comments, suggestions, criticisms? All much appreciated. 

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24 comments:

  1. What a jerk! I do hope a dire fate awaits him.

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    1. Thanks, Kylie. Oh, bad things ahead for him, indeed. His character is so easy to despise, and was sooooo much fun to bring to redemption. ;-)

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  2. LOL! Just the sort of boy a girl dreams of taking home to meet the parents :)

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    1. Yeppers, lol! Can you just imagine, Ian??? :-) Thanks for visiting :-)

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  3. Yeah, don't like him much. Great six! :)

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    1. Thanks, Jessica :-) ! He's painted pretty unlikable :-)

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  4. Oh my, I bet you either found this really hard to write, or you had a ball with it! Can't wait to see what Cuylrh thinks of it.

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    1. Haha! Good to see you, Owly! I had a ball with him! He was probably the most fun to write of all the characters. Perhaps not the most gratifying one though. That would be Cuylrh's grandfather, the High King. What a prick. But it was amazing crafting him into a sympathetic character...every here and there, one little old word at a time. :-) Thanks for visiting :-)

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  5. What a maroon! ;-) So glad Marissa rejected the jerk.

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    1. Haha! Oh, that fits him to a T. Hi Mac. How is the book launch going? I don't know if you'll see this. I'll contact you via fb. Care to do an interview? :-) Thanks for visiting :-)!

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  6. I hope someone knocks him out to stop his mouth from saying anymore. ;) Though it is curious that she seems to enjoy such a priveleged position in their group.

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  7. He certainly has a jaundiced view of women.

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    1. Yes, Dhurstan is jerk, It was fun writing him that way, but even more fun helping him find understanding and redemption! :-) Thanks, Sue :-)

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  8. Oh boy...not liking this guy at all. Great six! I'm guessing there will be a woman one day who will bring him to his knees.

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  9. no a peach...more like moldy rotten peach :)

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    1. :-) Yeppers...that Dhurstan sure is. ;-) Thanks, Tammy :-)

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  10. Yep, I'm glad I'm married, because this would be my type of guy! ;)
    But I wonder, if it's true that they pick up and share women on occasion, as he says. If so, I hope Cuylrh is not in on it...
    Great six, Teresa! They made me think; and not only about him being a jerk, but also whether their culture would approve of such..things.

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    1. Hi Dana :-) Yeah, Cuylrh is quite the guy. It was a constant struggle to keep him sufficiently flawed-- to not allow him to slip into Gary Stu territory. :-) Thanks for visiting, dearie :-)

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  11. How did I miss this?! He strikes me as a friend who believes he's doing right by Cuylrh, even if it *is* at Marissa's expense. It'll be interesting to see how their friendship unfolds after this. (And I'm glad you're back to working on ATNS!)

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  12. Thanks, Monica! You, dear girl, often give me little nudges when I most need them. Thank you :-)

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