Hello
all. Last Sunday of the year!
Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
It's the beginning of chapter three. The MC, sixty-something year old Tildie--who was widowed three years ago, is not happy about her little group of friends dragging her out of her house to go Christmas shopping. It's been three years since she lost her husband Harp, and she's still working through it all, teetering between grief, and a need to get on with her life. She is the POV character. Carol, Lindy, and Sissy are her friends. Ben is a man from her past. It's five days before Christmas. My last post ended with this sentence: Sissy said through a smile, ""The man's still got it." We continue from there.
Tildie looked down at her plate, doing everything she could to avoid their conversation.
"Oh look, he's coming this way," Sissy was out of her chair before Tildie could stop her. "Ben! Oh Ben?" Her voice rose well above the patrons' chatter while her arm, waving like a turning windmill, completed the spectacle. "Hey, come sit with us."
Tildie's cheeks burned and her smile felt stiff when she looked up and met his eyes. He stood before them, wearing his easy, lopsided grin. God, still shades of the handsome kid he was decades ago.
That's it. Thank you for reading it. Though this story is published, I still learn from your feedback--and I'm so grateful for any insight you share.
Next week, I'll be barrelling into the New Year with my Nano story from 2014, a scifi/dystopian.
Happy New Year!! Have fun--and be safe. :-)
He sounds gorgeous. Nicely done Teresa. Ben has gotten Tildie's attention, but will she get his?
ReplyDeleteIt takes time, but he does. Thanks, Kim!
DeleteWonder imagery. Really enjoyed this tale, Teresa.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for everything, Karen! :-)
DeleteSweet. I love her reaction/observations.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Cara! :-)
DeleteI'm wondering the same thing Kim is! Great snippet. Have fun writing in the new year! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Amy. I hope 2016 is grand for all of us!
DeleteHer shyness makes me wonder what went on between them so long ago. Very fun snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis! :-)
DeleteLove behind the schoolyard. Oh yes. Lovely snippet, my friend.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Charmaine! :-)
DeleteLove this story! Didn't know it was published, so I'm off to put it on my Kindle! I want to know if they get together after all this denial. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna!! :-)
DeleteI'm a big fan of an easy grin, myself. Especially when it's reflected in open eyes. Something new for my Kindle, too! =)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Shan! :-)
DeleteWith friends like these... I really feel for her embarrassment!
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad that came through the words. Thanks, Caitlin. :-)
DeleteLove her reactions -made me smile.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad it made you smile, Daryl! Thanks. :-)
DeleteNothing like a friend to embarrass the heck out of a person.
ReplyDeleteHaha! Yeppers, friends'll do that. Thanks, Victoria! :-)
DeleteAh yes - the gorgeous smile!
ReplyDeleteNothing makes a girl melt faster. :-) Thanks, Aurora!
DeleteBen sounds great. I do feel her embarrassment, though. Nice excerpt.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elaine! :-)!
DeleteI very much enjoyed reading this story in the set...great snippet for today, with the hero's lopsided grin.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica! And thanks for reading the story! :-)
DeleteSounds interesting. Blast from the past stories can be a real hoot.
ReplyDeleteThey do have history. :-) Thanks, Ed! :-)
DeleteOh man, nothing like busybody friends to liven up the scene, eh? Wonder how much food she'll manage to actually eat with "shades of handsome" at the table! LOL! Great snippet. Have a happy New Year!
ReplyDelete:-) Yeah, they are sort of busybodies! Thanks, Rose!
DeleteI liked this story a lot. In a world that often seems all shoving and harsh words, it was a lovely picture of good friends and gentle romance.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Gem. :-) !
DeleteGreat active writing. Great job!
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