Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) September 11...
Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE.
This week's snippet: We're back to our main character, Lily, and her dog Jobe, in a holding cell on an alien ship. They've met up with other humans, all from France. Jean is one of them. The alien who abducted her (Dev Areen)has just begun recruiting prisoners (for what??) by promising them extra food, better food. An enormous creature volunteered. Last week's snippet ended with this: "Metal bracelets graced its ankles and wrists; broken bits of chain dangled from each."
We continue from there... Please forgive creative punctuation.
Dev Areen’s men raised their weapons, but it had no effect on this one. Lily silently cheered when the guards took several steps back to avoid contact with the huge thing. She crossed her fingers that it would crush Dev Areen right where he was holding his pompous court.
It was not her day. She could have lived with that, but then it really turned out to not be her day. Blue-black pointed at her and said, “You will come.”
Her knee-jerk reaction was to tell him no, but if he just left Jobe alone she could bear nearly anything. She turned to Jean and asked in a hushed voice, “Please keep Jobe. This bastard has promised to kill him, and if I don’t come back, please take care of him?”
That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.
Humans...capable of such beauty, such kindness, generosity and love.
Humans...capable of the vilest expressions of evil...