Hello
fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) Hope everyone in the states is having a good Labor Day weekend. And I hope everyone else is having a good early September weekend. :-)
Weekend Writing
Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of
their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment,
critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart
good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants
do both, can be found HERE.
This
week's snippet: We're back to our main character, Lily, and her dog Jobe, in a holding cell on an alien ship. The alien who abducted her has just begun recruiting prisoners by promising them extra food, better food. An enormous creature just volunteered. Last week's snippet ended with this: "The guards drew weapons, slowing down the behemoth."
We continue from there...
In
the bright light, Lily could see it from head to toe. She might have been a
little more careful in the dark if she’d gotten a good look at it before now.
Thick hair covered from the top of its head to its feet. Shoe-less and in ragged clothes, it looked
like someone had caught a Sasquatch and tried to domesticate it.
Dev
Areen’s words yanked Lily from her thoughts. “Anyone else?” He stared at
another large creature, naked skin in large rolls flopping on its frame. It
stood and ambled his way, the single eye on its forehead never breaking contact
with the alien in charge. Metal bracelets graced its ankles and wrists; broken
bits of chain dangled from each.
That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.
She hasn't volunteered yet? I was so sure she'd volunteer.
ReplyDeleteHum, it doesn't look like she's going to volunteer at any moment. Maybe they'll offer her something more enticing?
ReplyDeleteCyclops? I'd stay clear of him. :-) Love the descriptions of these guys.
ReplyDeleteI agree. The descriptions are wonderful and scary. Get our friends out of there.
ReplyDeleteI also love the descriptions, and your imagination. Now, is Lily going to volunteer, or is Dev going to pull some other trick?
ReplyDeleteI think she'd be wise not to step forward. Whatever he's up to it can't be good. Also I somehow have a feeling the domesticated Sasquatch may not be a bad guy.
ReplyDeleteInteresting, can't imagine what's going to happen next, so of course I'll have to keep reading. Great snippet...
ReplyDeleteWow. Can't wait to see what happens next.
ReplyDeleteI suppose the big ones are hungrier. Will she volunteer too?
ReplyDeleteWow, I had no idea her cell mates were so interesting. Wonder if there are any allies among them? Fascinating stuff, Teresa.
ReplyDeleteI love the descriptions of these other beings. And I'm anxiously awaiting her to volunteer. So much intrigue! :)
ReplyDeleteSounds like they have two rather large volunteers--makes sense, it takes more food to feed a larger body. But I wonder what he wants them for, exactly. Can't be good.
ReplyDeleteExcellent and unique descriptions! Also, if I ever have a hair-metal-band, I'm naming then Domesticated Sasquatch. ;)
ReplyDeleteThat's one scary or two scary monsters.
ReplyDeleteI thought he would volunteer her or something, but this works too. A fight is always fun to watch...wait? Maybe they aren't even expected to fight? I do wonder what they will have to do for their extra food! Great snippet!
ReplyDeletelol. nice snippet. got me curious.
ReplyDeleteoh my goodness, I take it there will be quite a showdown. Very interesting.
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