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Sunday, June 11, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors June 11, 2017



Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! 


  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
               
  This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship.  The last line last week was: She was living every terrifying, scifi-dystopian novel she’d ever read.  

Here we go...


A smile spread from his lips up to those two chips of blue-ice eyes, making them twinkle. “Every tale begins with a bit of truth, even when you label it fiction. You should not be afraid, Earth Lily. Once you see Teauche Brigard and accept it as your world, you will understand it is a good system.”

She took a slow, deep breath and willed her voice to be steady.  The conversation had to change; the focus needed to be on something other than his persistent delusion that she was going to his planet--and that she'd be happy there. Since there was no weather to ask about, she voiced the second safe topic that popped into her mind.  “Tell me about the people who crew this ship.”

“As I said, they are good people. They are—"



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17 comments:

  1. I enjoy her determination that regardless of what he believes, she still refuses to fall under his control. I'm curious to learn about his crew, too.

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  2. They are? They are? Major cliff hanger! Can't wait to read more.

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  3. You have me hanging on that last fragment of a sentence...

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  4. I can sense her panic that she might never see her loved ones again. I wonder if he'll succeed in putting her at ease?

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  5. She's smart and clever and will get the heck out of there and soon! That's it. Nice snippet!

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  6. If he can see into her mind, surely he knows she'll never accept his world! And that dangling sentence is a real tease :)

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  7. Lily is so optimistic about getting away. I can't wait to see how she makes it happen. Do I sense an ulterior motive in asking about the crew? Great snippet!

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  8. Doesn't he see that she doesn't want to come to his planet?

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  9. Great description: "A smile spread from his lips up to those two chips of blue-ice eyes, making them twinkle."

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  10. I love the idea of a 'safe subject' to talk about and having to ask about the crew instead of the weather!

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  11. Every bit of data she can gather will be helpful, no doubt. Good plan to keep him talking! Enjoyed the excerpt...

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  12. There's probably not an easy way to shift him off his future plans. He seems quite set on them!

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  13. They are what? What?! Great cliffhanger haha

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  14. She is determined to stay put, but I have a hunch is as determined. I'm curious to know what stopped him from continuing his account of the crew. Perhaps he's figured out her ploy. :)

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  15. They are... under attack? Good cliff hanger.

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  16. Do you know what comes of being late in responding? Everybody has already said what I wanted to. Great snippet. Love the cliff-hanger.

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