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Sunday, January 27, 2013

Final Six Sentence Sunday: sniff sniff



Thank you, admins. What a wonderful opportunity you've given to so many.  I've met so many fantastic people through SSS. My gratitude is immeasurable.

For the final post of SSS, I'll stay with the WIP I started my posts with. ATNS

The worst has happened. Rissa, while apart from Cuylrh, has been taken into custody by the High King, Daekartha (Cuylrh's grandfather).  She's been forced to make a choice that will keep her and Cuylrh separated--indefinitely, and the High King ordered her sterilized so that she will never produce an unwanted or unworthy heir to his Empire.

Cuylrh has just become aware that Rissa is in Daekartha's custody. They are in a holy house (church) celebrating the Feast of  the Giver (their God).  Part of Rissa's agreement to the High King is sworn on Jia's life. (the first ever female King's guard)  Daekartha realized Rissa's greatest weakness is that she cares for other people, and manipulated her using that knowledge.

Rissa's POV:



"Just like home, just like Earth.  The holy men talk a good game while they spend precious tithes, gilding walls and altars where starving beggars pray to a God who turns a deaf ear. Why believe, why believe any of it-- that the Giver above loves all? 

She fought her compulsion  to scream in fury at the miseries dealt to the paupers, dealt to anyone but those whom chance or corruption had gifted with wealth and status.  But the thought of two people whom she loved dearly, contained her internal hell-fire of smoldering rage.  Their safety-- Jia’s very life, depended upon Rissa to bite her tongue and just bear the hurt, the insult, and the dealings of self-righteous men who judged her on a random chance of creation—the color of her skin and  her eyes."

That's it. Left hanging in a bad place.  If you'd like to read more next week, please check out the post immediately following this one.  It's HERE

It sure has been fun.  Thanks, everyone.

30 comments:

  1. Wow, Teresa! Intense and philosophical six this week! I like the fact you were able to delve so deeply into her thoughts without losing fluidity. Nicely done!

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  2. Thanks, Jess. I wanted to make it a counter for the last SSS post. :-) I'm tickled pink to see your name on wewriwa! :-)

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  3. Wonderful exploration of this character, Teresa, You get deep inside not just Rissa, but because she's facing the same issues a lot of us are, she serves as a mirror for us. I like deep stuff like that :D

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    1. :-) This book might be my life's journey lol. It is deep. It started out so innocently, just an alien abduction. I am the queen of complicating things--and this story shows it. Thanks for reading it, Owly! :-)

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  4. You place your story in another time but people don't change. Your six sounds like today's breaking news. Fascinating.

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    1. Thanks, Charmaine. Wow. I guess that it is rather pessimistic. I'm afraid that the true nature of many people will never change. Power corrupts. Wealth and title are intrinsically woven with power. Religion... What can I say. I hope the underlying message gets there. In this snippet, her thoughts are bold, but in most of the story, the theme is subtle. Religion and faith are two different things. :-)

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  5. Woo! Lots of great emotion in this six. Thanks for sharing. :)

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    1. Thanks for visiting and reading, Joya. Let's stay in touch! :-)

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    1. Thanks, Karysa. I love the way you spell your name! :-)

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  7. Lovely emotion, and some wise observations as well.

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    1. Thanks, Elaine. She grapples with God, and with so many things. Thanks for visiting and I look forward to seeing you next Sunday! ;-)

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  8. Wow, so much revealed in this six! Wonderful writing! :)

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  9. Great final six, Teresa. Hope to see you on one of the SSS sequel sites!

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    1. Thanks, Kate. I hope we can stay in touch. :-) You've been a wise and generous writing colleague :-)

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  10. Lots of juicy emotion. Great 6! Can't wait to see what happens in your 8 sentences next Sunday.

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    1. Thanks, Kylie! Woot--see you next week! :-)

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  11. Beautiful six. I'm going on http://www.wewriwa.com/2013/01/welcome-to-weekend-writing-warriors-r.html too, but the first time around it'll still be six, because I'm on Skye's list too.

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    1. That is wonderful, Sue Ann! However, whatever, whichever way it works for people, I'll just be tickled pink to not lose track of people. :-)

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  12. Powerful six! I'm intrigued by the Weekend Writing Warriors -- I'll check it out!

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    1. Thanks, Donna! I hope we can stay in touch. :-)

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  13. Intense six, Teresa! I've enjoyed meeting you through SSS - it has been a pleasure! And, thank you for letting me know about the Weekend Writing Warriors! I won't be posting for the next 2 weekends, but I'll definately check it out!

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    1. Lorraine, I love your writing. I so enjoy the way you infuse a sort of happenstance humor into your characters' predicaments. :-) Thanks.

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  14. Well that situation certainly stinks. I hope she gets out of it, and I think she will in time.

    Will there be a pronunciation guide with this book? At the moment I'm calling the hero Curly because it at least has most of the letters in it. ;)

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    1. Indeed, she will. I had not given it a thought--a pronunciation guide, but considering how well Monica's guide works, probably will include something like that. "curly" lololol... I'm picturing "City Slickers" lol... Nice. Thanks :-)

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  15. A very powerful and painful contemplation. So intense, and poignantly juicy..and, oh, Jia.. I haven't heard that name in a while..I'm very curious to see how this unfolds. Leaving us with one hell of a cliffhanger today! Great job! :)

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    1. Thanks, Dearie. I haven't done much with this story. I'm focusing on another right now. But I'm soon going o start dividing my time between the two.

      Good fix on the grab it button! Yay! :-) Thank you. :-)

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  16. Wow! Always fun to stop by and read your 6!

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    1. Thanks, Tanya! How the heck have you been? Will be stopping by :-)

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