Weekend Writing Warriors: March 31, 2013
Week 9: "A chade fight..."
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This week, returning to my WIP, ATNS, and immediately following last week's 8 sentence post (if you want to read it first, it's Here. ) This takes place about half way through the story.
Rissa has just spent nearly two months being trained to use a sword, trial by fire--eat, drink, sleep, think sword. This scene is the fourth post of a sword fight where she bested Dhurstan. He's one of Cuylrh's guards and also his oldest friend. Dhurstan despises Rissa-- the woman from a place called Earth, who has taken his place in his friend's heart. Cuylrh is the young King of Rialt, next in line to rule. The fight has wound down. Dhurstan is pinned with Rissa's sword across his throat.
Dhurstan’s brows lowered and his lips went slack, his face announcing his concession before his words did. Though his body was limp, no doubt a precaution to avoid risking fate or Rissa’s sword sharpening skills, his voice—barely above a whisper still carried a hint of something other than the respect she was due—disgust, or maybe loathing when he said, “Yes, I yield.”
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