Welcome Warriors, and Snipsuns, and anyone else who wanders in.
I want to share some sad news from inside our Wewriwa community. Susan Koenig unexpectedly passed away on May 30th. She used to sign up under the name "Sue K". I'd recently had dinner with her and found her to be as witty, intelligent, and kind in person as she seemed online. I will miss her, our emails and our writing discussions. If you are unfamiliar with her work, Jenna Jaxon wrote a very moving (and thought provoking) In Memoriam for Susan.
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I've picked up directly from two weeks ago when Fode warned that it's dangerous to head upriver in the dark.
As if sensing their uneasiness, Fode added, “I don’t need to know
any of your business. I’ll just put this out there. I know people. I know
people who are like me, people who can be trusted. And some of those people
would put you up for the night.”
“And they’d have no problem with our friend, here?” Kad nodded
toward where Tayden sat with his head cocked slightly, like a hunting cur listening,
trying to make sense of the words around him.
That's it. What jumps out at you, good or bad? I'd love to hear it. Thank you so much for reading this.
That is sad news, Teresa. And I see you only recently posted about meeting Susan in person.
ReplyDeleteAs for the snippet, the tension between them seems to be easing slightly, but the second part made me wonder if there is something obvious about Tayden that people might have a problem with? If anything had been mentioned previously, I either missed it or it is long forgotten weeks ago :)
Thanks, Ian. Yes, I was fortunate to have met her. I'm surprised to learn that she was 70. We never talked about age. She sure didn't look it.
DeleteI've not mentioned much yet about what makes Tayden different even at a glance. I'll be infusing that in upcoming snippets. :-) Thanks for visiting.
Fantastic description of Tayden "like a hunting cur listening..."
ReplyDeleteThanks, Gem!
DeleteGreat analogy. Do you have a cur dog? My home state of Louisiana has one as the state dog.
ReplyDeleteNope, no cur dog. American Cocker Spaniel. My son has a Redbone Coonhound--closest thing to a cur in the family. :-)
DeleteI didn't know that about Louisiana. Thanks for visiting, Chip. :-)
Dang, I have a whole lot of catching up to do, lol. Stumbling in, we can call it a read and run ;)
ReplyDeleteSaddened by your news. She sounded like a very wonderful woman.
I love how you describe Tayden, and how he's trying to make sense of the words.
Also -- I'm loving the name Fode.
Thanks, Keeley. She was. :-)
DeleteThanks for visiting--and the encouraging words. :-)
So very sad to hear about Sue K. I always enjoyed exchanging comments with her....sending good thoughts to her husband and family and friends.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed your excerpt today, descriptive as always and leaves me wanting more. Great 8!
Thanks, Veronica. It is so very sad.
DeleteThanks for the read and the kind words. :-)
Isn't Tayden the other worldly baby now grown up? This is coming close to the moment I've waited for.
ReplyDeleteI'm saddened for Sue K's family. What a terrible loss.
Yes, he is. All grown up.
DeleteIt is very sad. My heart goes out to her husband...
Thanks for visiting. :-)
Sorry to hear of a death in the community. Must say I wondered at the word "cur" as it has negative as well as positive connotations.
ReplyDeleteYes, a sad day in our writing community.
DeleteSue Ann, you always challenge me to think. I admit to not realizing the negative connotations to cur.I've mentioned it earlier in the story in a bar scene where locals are drunk and talk about a hunting cur being bitten by savages. I hope people read it in the same light. Positive.
Thank you. :-)
Very sorry to hear about Sue K.'s death.
ReplyDeleteI'm very curious as to what it is about Tayden that makes him different. The tension just keeps growing! Nice work.
Thanks, Alexis. :-)
DeleteI am very sorry to hear about Sue. My condolences.
ReplyDeleteLike everyone else I am curious to find out what it is about Tayden that will cause trouble. Great atmosphere.
Thank you, Tina.
DeleteDescriptions filtering in the next few snippets. Thanks for visiting. :-)
Thanks for telling us about Sue. That is a great loss to the writing community.
ReplyDeleteI'm curious about Tayden and why he couldn't make sense of the words he heard. Nicely done.
Thanks, Elaine. It is a great loss.
DeleteWhat is it about Tayden that would cause a problem. I don't think it was ever disclosed (at least not through these snippets.). This piece does make me curious about trusting these people that Fode knows.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Chelle. Details coming. It's actually still pretty early in the story. :-)
DeleteThank you so much, Teresa, for mentioning Sue's passing. She is so badly missed. You were so fortunate to have been able to meet her in person.
ReplyDeleteThe description of Tayden is intriguing--what about him is so different people might turn him away? Great 8!
Sue was a sweetheart. Quick with a laugh or a smile. I think "The Bench" revealed so much about the human beneath the online presence.
DeleteI do feel blessed to have met her.
I'm so very sorry for your loss, Jenna.
I only 'met' Sue online once or twice, but she always seemed very nice.
ReplyDeleteIsn't Tayden an albino?
Yep, he's lacking some pigmentation. And there are other differences that I'll slip into upcoming snippets. Thanks for visiting, Sarah! :-)
ReplyDeleteHoo boy. What is up with Tayden? I'd like another helping please!
ReplyDeleteCuriouser and curiouser :) I really like your "voice" in this excerpts, Teresa. And thanks for the food festival comments on my blog!
ReplyDelete..."like a hunting cur listening" is wonderful. Very notable that he's a cur, not a wolf or a fox or anything one might find romantic or admirable. But then, even a cur has his charms. In just that one phrase, you have painted a character I want to know about.
ReplyDeleteThanks for telling us about Sue. Seems a great loss to the writing community.
ReplyDeleteSo saddened by the news . :-(
ReplyDeleteLovely snippet as always, Teresa, love the simile "like a hunting cur listening"!