Welcome Warriors, and Snipsuns. So glad you could stop by for a visit. :-)
Happy October. It feels like it here. We have a freeze warning tonight. That would make it the end of the 2014 growing season. :-( Time to gather the pumpkins and pick a last batch of beans.
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Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
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The travelers are on the boat that is taking them upriver into the Firce Mountains. Tayden asked Wiley(river driver) if his Maker ever answers when he talks to him. Wiley's answering him, telling him a story from "back before this hair was gray." :-) We are still in Kad's POV. Final sentence from last week: I looked up and seen that the man of different skin was already on board, leaning over the side with his hand reaching toward me."
I gripped his hand and he started pulling me up. All these years come and gone since that day, I still sometimes wonder about what happened next. At first I thought maybe I rung my bell real hard on the boat when I was fallin out. You see, when I looked up at that man, his face changed from a Soothman's to a Juman's, and then it changed again into an Albainne's,"He nodded toward Tayden. "He could’a been your brother. All the while he smiled, and his eyes was full of peace. He managed to calm me in the middle of that raging storm--and that still don't make a lick of sense."
That's it. What works, what doesn't?
Interesting...I love the details! Nice work, Teresa!
ReplyDeleteNice snippet, great immediacy. This Line really puled it all together for me: He managed to calm me in the middle of that raging storm--and that still don't make sense that he could do that." really good writing!!
ReplyDeleteHis voice is unique and his story deep and rich with detail. Wonderful snippet!
ReplyDeleteeyes full of peace is a wonderful, soothing image!
ReplyDeleteI love all your details, and how he found a rescuer in the middle of such terror.
ReplyDeleteSome very weird stuff going on here! Intriguing.
ReplyDeleteNow I'm wondering if Tayden might have some of the same abilities. Wiley's voice is great, as always. One thing, it seems like you could drop "that he could that" from the last line. As a reader, I know what didn't make sense. Just a thought.
ReplyDeleteLove it. Seems like the perfect way to round out that story.
ReplyDeleteFirst page review, hmmm, I've got to check that out. Also it is cold here too. I have to get the pilot light on my furnace going, because it went out last night. Ugh. I have to tell you I love the voice you create in your work. The language you use is excellent. Interesting since it fits in so perfectly with last weeks snippet. Now I'm excited to see how their relationship works out. Love it!
ReplyDeleteHow gorgeous is this, Teresa? The symbolism alone . . .
ReplyDeleteNo wonder Wiley is so accepting! :)
I love Wiley, love his voice and style : ). Can't wait for this book!!!!
ReplyDeleteOhhhhh! Intriguing! Wiley's story continues to keep me enthralled. Well done.
ReplyDeleteWow, that's unexpected. Well done.
ReplyDeleteReally a fascinating anecdote and I like the way Wiley is still puzzling over it, all the many years later. Great 8!
ReplyDeleteAnother great excerpt! So who was that mysterious man who saved Wiley? I'm going to think about that all week, for sure. Can't wait to see what Tayden and his friends think of that story. :)
ReplyDeleteWhat an intriguing excerpt- and I'm still loving Wiley's voice. So authentic!
ReplyDeletealways great. Cant wait to see whats in store next week.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting, Teresa. So the strange men seems to be like everyman, the way he changed. I like it. What a great tale to have Kad tell. Good story weaving!
ReplyDeleteOn a cold night like this (here too) I can imagine sitting around a campfire mesmerized by Wiley's tales, adore listening to him. Strange info about that stranger's face changing, wonder what's up with that. Another great snippet.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet! I like Wiley's conversational style, really brings his character to life. I'm very interested in the shifting faces of the man of different skin. Another reviewer mentioned how that last sentence brought it all together and I agree with that. Well done.
ReplyDeleteOh how I love this story teller and the tale he tells. And this means you, dear Teresa, teller of tales.
ReplyDeleteI love how you capture the confusion of the storm but ground the story at the end with that beautiful last line.
ReplyDeleteInteresting to see that he changes, I wonder why is that?
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