Welcome Warriors, and Snipsuns. So glad you could stop by for a visit. :-) The end of October already, can you believe it?
I'm back after a two week hiatus for family stuff. In that two weeks, when I had time to write, I worked on ATNS--the rewrite and line by line edit. In the process, I got some distance from my WIP, "Tayden"which I've been pulling from for wewriwa for several months. Because of that distance--and my head refusing to wrap around that story, I'm going to pull from ATNS for a while. I'm 54 pages into the rewrite. It's a start. :-)
I'm going to excerpt the first 8 lines of the book. If you've visited my post from the First Page Review bloghop , you will have already read these 8 lines. By the way, you can still sign up for that until Friday at midnight. So, if you wonder what readers think of your first page (up to 1,000 words), then sign up here.
Now, down to business. :-) Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
If you're new to Weekend Writing Warriors ( #8sunday ) , the best advice I can give you to make it work for you is to visit other people on the list, read their 8 sentences, then leave a comment. Most participants will give you a return visit and leave a comment.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
Two years is a long time to not exist. At least to not exist on Earth. Technically I was missing, but I may as well have not existed since I have no memories to explain where I went, or where I was. I’ll get right to the nuts and bolts of it. I was one of those “vanished without a trace” stories. The rub is, I returned without a trace, too. One minute, I was in the state park playing hide and seek with my two year old, and the next I was in the desert alone.
Two years had gone by.
That's it. What works, what doesn't?
Good opening - raises intriguing questions right from the start. This reminded me, must put up a post for that bloghop!
ReplyDeleteThat sounds like a hell of a story. I'm curious to see what will happen to him from there and if he can go back to his life and f he can get the memories back.
ReplyDeleteTotally mindboggling,I've thought of all sorts of possibilities - cryogenically frozen, amnesia, coma... really curious where this is going.
ReplyDeleteI'm hooked and my imagination is in overdrive. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteWow! What an opening. My mind is already racing with possibilities and I want to know more!
ReplyDeleteOh my, what a great opening! How can a reader not wonder what the heck is going on with that. Mark me hooked too!
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Love this opening so damn much! It all works Reesie!
ReplyDeleteAwesome first line. Totally hooked. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis is the part that really caught me> One minute, I was in the state park playing hide and seek with my two year old, and the next I was in the desert alone.
ReplyDeleteTwo years had gone by.
Love the setup!
My first thought is an alien abduction was involved. It makes me curious to know the full story.
ReplyDeleteTears came as I read this eight. Beyond hooked. Carry on, Teresa.
ReplyDeletePulled me right in! Fast paced and fascinating!
ReplyDeleteI want to read more! I'm completely intrigued. Wonderful snippet, Teresa!
ReplyDeleteTotally works for me! I feel compelled to keep reading and I'm all worried about the two year old and.....excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteI love the phrase, "returned without a trace." Because that's almost a bigger mystery, here, isn't it? :)
ReplyDeleteMy question is how does he know it's two years?
ReplyDeleteHonestly, the excerpt intrigued me and made me want to know more. I love the 'returned without a trace.' You don't ever hear that.
ReplyDeleteWhat an opening!! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI think it works wonderfully. I am hooked. The only thing I am unsure of is if you need the last line. We are aware from the opening line two years had passed.
ReplyDeleteI was wondering what happened to you. I thought you were mad at us. Hope everything is okay with you and your family. Great snippet! I love the vanished idea. It makes everything so very eerie. Eek! Can't wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff. I love an amnesia mystery--in fact, my new book that I'm really excited about starting to write in a week has one! :)
ReplyDeleteGood to see you again.
"I returned without a trace, too."
ReplyDeleteGreat line!