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Sunday, July 31, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors: July 31st, 2016



Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-)  Holy moly, it's almost August!

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found  HERE.               
This week's snippet: The male MC, Theusand,  can sense fear, and he's using that to try and locate an "intellectai" on board the Dai Klavven ship he's responsible for maintaining the peace on. The intellectai is, of course, our female MC, Lily.

He headed for deck four. When the vertical transport doors opened, the wave of fear hit him hard. He nearly doubled over before he filtered it, controlling the intensity of the emotion slamming him. He took off to his left, and after a dozen steps the wash lessened. He reversed course. The fear grew again.
His long strides hurried him toward the source. He assessed as he walked. The Intellektai was female, terrified, angry, sad, and her mind was powerful. Then the oddest part of it all dawned on him; she had no idea her emotions were reaching out to others.


That's it. What works? What doesn't?  I appreciate your comments and learn from them. :-)

21 comments:

  1. Very nice twist, Teresa. So there may be some hope for Lilly, after all!

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  2. I want to read this so bad my one-click finger is twitching. Are you done yet?????

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  3. I love it! Yes, we humans do not realize how much emotion we often radiate, even when we try not to. LOL I'm feeling the same as Cara. I'm anxious to read this story! :)

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  4. That's wild! I absolutely cannot wait for this finished story, Teresa, these excerpts have been utterly fantastic!

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  5. This works so well. Interesting story.

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  6. Always knew there was something special about her! Great twist! :D

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  7. Fascinating new development going on here! Loved the snippet.

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  8. I'm intrigued. Loved that last line. Are there others who can sense her emotions as well as he can? Though if you really pay attention, you can sense how a person feels. Anger and tension sure catch your attention. lol But joy can be contagious. Great snippet.

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  9. A fascinating snippet. A man who can sense a woman's emotions without her having to tell him. How unique!

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  10. This is a fascinating development. So he's there to keep the peace. He comes across as a sympathetic character, but his role means he might not be sympathetic to Lily's predicament!

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  11. very interesting, though it sounds like he works for the bad guys. Can't wait to see how this develops!

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  12. Awesome! And he seems surprised she wouldn't be aware of his ability. Despite his advantages, Theusand has a few things to learn, and I've no doubt our plucky heroine will teach him!

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  13. I really want to see what happens when they meet now - great snippet!

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  14. Great tension here. It sounds like he's never met humans before, so I imagine meeting Lily is going to be quite a learning experience for him.

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  15. Nice, Teresa! Intriguing tease brings up lots of questions I can't wait to have answered.

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  16. Well, how would she know if no one told her? Go investigate, help her out!

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  17. Then I'll bet she also has no idea who or what Theusand is and that he's searching for her.

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  18. Great tension, and I can't wait for them to meet.

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  19. Interesting dynamics are play here. I can't wait to see what happens.

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  20. Why would you even think that? Now, does that give him advantage, or only until she finds out? Great snippet!

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  21. I love all the emotional/mental telepathy stuff. This is just my cup of tea.

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