Hello
fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) It's good to be back. I've been awfully busy, life things. Have a few busy weeks coming up, too. But this week I''m happy to be back and to have the time to peruse all of your wonderful snippets!
Weekend Writing
Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at
wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of
their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live
before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we
don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on
empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA)
Then we visit each other and read, comment,
critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart
good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants
do both, can be found HERE.
This
week's snippet: We're back to our main character, Lily. After Earth's invasion, she was captured by the wasp-like alien (Bulrager) slavers. She caught the attention of one of their military leaders who has forced her to go with him to another place in the ship. She's just about to realize that she is at a fighting ring. Last
week's snippet ended with this: " Bulragers climbed makeshift ladders and ropes to reach
seats
perched on top of its rust-stained sides."
We continue from there...
" One of the aliens leaped to grasp the top of the wall then swung sideways to
hook his leg on the upper edge. He hoisted himself up then another alien clapped
him on the back. They sat next to each other, teeth clacking in their sick
laughter.
Jesus H Christ. Dev Areen’s
words came back to her, actually one very specific word. “Entertainment.” This
was a fight ring. She looked at hairy,
and then at flabby, both giants among humans, even among the Bulragers. Trying
to will away her fear was useless; it was here to stay."
That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm
grateful for every bit of feedback you share.
Very frightening predicament, yikes. How is she going to get out of this>
ReplyDeleteThanks, Chelle. I think she might need some help. :-)
DeleteLove that last line! Absolutely perfect! She's in a tight, frightening spot. I wonder how she'll manage to stay alive and get out of it.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Daelyn. Well, things are about to get interesting as far as how she'll get away from the Bulragers. :-)
DeleteThose Aliens are pretty scary.
ReplyDeleteScary indeed, Linda! :-)
DeleteHi Teresa, I have missed your snippets!
ReplyDeleteLilly must be wondering if she is on the 'entertainment' menu!
Thanks, Kim! I have missed yours as well. :-) !
DeleteYep, Lily knows now. When she already thought it was horrific (being abducted) her life has taken a truly bad turn.
OMG! How is she going to stay alive? I don't see a good ending to this... Great snippet, Teresa! Can't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elyzabeth! She could soon reach a point that she has thinks death might be a better option, huh? :-)
DeleteAnd worst of all, I bet Lilly never dreamed of being in show business.
ReplyDeleteHahaha! Nope. Let alone starring in her very own novel. Thanks, Ed!
DeleteOh man, I don't see this working out well for her. This story is just non-stop tension!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christina! The tension is going to slow down soon. Or maybe it remains, but changes in intensity and in focus. :-)
DeleteNot a good place to be. Awesome dire straits!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Cara! A few more amped-up pages of this, then a rescue--of sorts. :-)
DeleteNice one. You grabbed her stark realization of the situation well. She is in deep doo doo!
ReplyDeleteHistory Sleuth's Mysteries
Deep doo doo indeed! Thanks, Cindy :-)
DeleteYikes! I'd be terrified in her situation, too. I want to keep reading to find out what happens to her.
ReplyDeleteJesus H Christ, indeed! I'm as scared as she is, yet I can't wait for the action to unfold! Great storytelling! :)
ReplyDeleteTruly scary! She doesn't seem built for a gladiator.
ReplyDeleteYou paint quite a picture. Scary beyond words and she is trapped like a rat. So what happens next, we wonder and wait 'til next week or what?
ReplyDeleteOhhh dear, she's in trouble. Again. Great ending for the snippet! :D
ReplyDeleteYou paint a very gruesome picture. Hard to imagine how she can escape but I'm hoping you've dreamed up something!
ReplyDeleteGreat visuals. Love it
ReplyDeleteI would be crying with terror, in her situation. I hope she gets out of it, even if she does need help to do so.
ReplyDeleteCant't wait to see how this unfolds!
ReplyDeleteGreat increase of tension. Can't wait to see how she gets out of this dilemma.
ReplyDeleteUh oh, our worst fears seem to be confirmed and combat is in the offing. Very tense situation and I can't wait to see what she does. Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteHer bad day just got worse.
ReplyDeleteI'd be terrified. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteOh boy, there's a place to find yourself. Guess she's going to have to learn exactly what she's made of now. Great snippet, Teresa, and I particularly liked the "fear was here to stay" line.
ReplyDeleteHow scary. I'm intrigued to know what she's going to do.
ReplyDeleteI knew this nasty piece of work wasn't going to want her for anything good, but I wouldn't think he'd want her dead yet, either. How he believes she'll survive is beyond me!
ReplyDeleteThis is getting worse and worse for Lily. But if she's the heroine, I have to think she'll beat the odds and her opponents. Can't wait to see how! Great snippet! I'm on the edge of my seat with this one.
ReplyDeleteOh, no, run says I! What will she do now?
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