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Saturday, October 22, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors October 23, 2016

 
Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-)  It's good to be back. I've been awfully busy, life things. Have a few busy weeks coming up, too. But this week I''m happy to be back and to have the time to peruse all of your wonderful snippets!

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA)  Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found  HERE.               
This week's snippet: We're back to our main character,  Lily.  After Earth's invasion, she was captured by the wasp-like alien (Bulrager) slavers. She caught the attention of one of their military leaders who has forced her to go with him to another place in the ship. She's just about to realize that she is at a fighting ring.  Last week's snippet ended with this: " Bulragers climbed makeshift ladders and ropes to reach seats perched on top of its rust-stained sides."
We continue from there...

" One of the aliens leaped to grasp the top of the wall then swung sideways to hook his leg on the upper edge. He hoisted himself up then another alien clapped him on the back. They sat next to each other, teeth clacking in their sick laughter.
 Jesus H Christ. Dev Areen’s words came back to her, actually one very specific word. “Entertainment.” This was a fight ring. She looked at hairy, and then at flabby, both giants among humans, even among the Bulragers. Trying to will away her fear was useless; it was here to stay."
        


 That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

36 comments:

  1. Very frightening predicament, yikes. How is she going to get out of this>

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    1. Thanks, Chelle. I think she might need some help. :-)

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  2. Love that last line! Absolutely perfect! She's in a tight, frightening spot. I wonder how she'll manage to stay alive and get out of it.

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    1. Thanks, Daelyn. Well, things are about to get interesting as far as how she'll get away from the Bulragers. :-)

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  3. Those Aliens are pretty scary.

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  4. Hi Teresa, I have missed your snippets!

    Lilly must be wondering if she is on the 'entertainment' menu!

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    1. Thanks, Kim! I have missed yours as well. :-) !

      Yep, Lily knows now. When she already thought it was horrific (being abducted) her life has taken a truly bad turn.

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  5. OMG! How is she going to stay alive? I don't see a good ending to this... Great snippet, Teresa! Can't wait to read more!

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    1. Thanks, Elyzabeth! She could soon reach a point that she has thinks death might be a better option, huh? :-)

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  6. And worst of all, I bet Lilly never dreamed of being in show business.

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    1. Hahaha! Nope. Let alone starring in her very own novel. Thanks, Ed!

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  7. Oh man, I don't see this working out well for her. This story is just non-stop tension!

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    1. Thanks, Christina! The tension is going to slow down soon. Or maybe it remains, but changes in intensity and in focus. :-)

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  8. Not a good place to be. Awesome dire straits!

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    1. Thanks, Cara! A few more amped-up pages of this, then a rescue--of sorts. :-)

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  9. Nice one. You grabbed her stark realization of the situation well. She is in deep doo doo!
    History Sleuth's Mysteries

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  10. Yikes! I'd be terrified in her situation, too. I want to keep reading to find out what happens to her.

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  11. Jesus H Christ, indeed! I'm as scared as she is, yet I can't wait for the action to unfold! Great storytelling! :)

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  12. Truly scary! She doesn't seem built for a gladiator.

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  13. You paint quite a picture. Scary beyond words and she is trapped like a rat. So what happens next, we wonder and wait 'til next week or what?

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  14. Ohhh dear, she's in trouble. Again. Great ending for the snippet! :D

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  15. You paint a very gruesome picture. Hard to imagine how she can escape but I'm hoping you've dreamed up something!

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  16. I would be crying with terror, in her situation. I hope she gets out of it, even if she does need help to do so.

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  17. Cant't wait to see how this unfolds!

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  18. Great increase of tension. Can't wait to see how she gets out of this dilemma.

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  19. Uh oh, our worst fears seem to be confirmed and combat is in the offing. Very tense situation and I can't wait to see what she does. Excellent excerpt!

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  20. Oh boy, there's a place to find yourself. Guess she's going to have to learn exactly what she's made of now. Great snippet, Teresa, and I particularly liked the "fear was here to stay" line.

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  21. How scary. I'm intrigued to know what she's going to do.

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  22. I knew this nasty piece of work wasn't going to want her for anything good, but I wouldn't think he'd want her dead yet, either. How he believes she'll survive is beyond me!

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  23. This is getting worse and worse for Lily. But if she's the heroine, I have to think she'll beat the odds and her opponents. Can't wait to see how! Great snippet! I'm on the edge of my seat with this one.

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  24. Oh, no, run says I! What will she do now?

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