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Saturday, January 27, 2018

Weekend Writing Warriors January 28, 2018



Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! 


  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
               
  This week's snippet is from a scifi short story working title: "Sporulators". Luke Eastwold, the pilot, speaks first here, talking to Lars, the agronomist.

Here we go...
“What do you think? With the far-rings settlements given up on thirty years ago, ships passing close enough to catch comm signals have been scarce. Still, don’t you think they’d have a loop transmitting? I don’t think anyone’s home. ”
Lars furrowed his brow. “Minimal communication has been the expected, and that causes little concern for the Department of Ethical and Sustainable Agriculture...”
Luke cut him off. “Minimal? That,  I could understand, but according to my flight contract with DESA, communication has been nonexistent.”
“We’re sure there’s a good reason for it.”  

  What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

42 comments:

  1. The reasons may be understandable, but I kinda doubt they're 'good.'

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  2. This Lars guy sounds like a bit of a pompous *$$. I wonder what it would take to actually cause some concern :)

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    1. Hehe... The concern will come. ;-) Thanks, Ian. :-)

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  3. Now, I'm wondering too. Intriguing.

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  4. There are many reasons why there is no communication. Always best to check for life if that can be done safely. I'm curious to read more. :)

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    1. Next on their list--to search for life. :-) Thanks, Jess!

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  5. I don't know if you read Gemina. But I'm getting that feel from this snipped.#wewriwa

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    1. I did not. I hadn't heard of it until I read your comment today. SO, doing what any curious author would do, I went and checked it out. :-) I have not stopped smiling since! :-D What a cool comparison! Thank you, Trin!

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    1. Haha! Spot on. There's a reason, but... Thanks, Aurora!

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  7. The situation is intriguing! Can't wait for more :)

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  8. "We're sure there's a good reason for it"? Doesn't sound very ethical to me. Intriguing snippet.

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    1. Haha! That Lars is part of DESA and that includes the word "Ethical" is rather ironic. :-) Thanks, Alexis!

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  9. I'm curious to know the reason. :) Great snippet.

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    1. Not till the end of the story, but I do drop hints along the way! :-) Thanks,Karen!

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  10. Hmmmmm! Reasons he already knows and hasn't shared? Makes me wonder . . .

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    1. You are an intuitive soul! Thanks, Nancy :-)

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  11. Well, it they're sure there's a good reason, then it's fine. What happened to 'better safe than sorry?'

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    1. They have to investigate and that means boots on the ground. :-) Eastwold is cautious. Pride won't come before his safety. Thanks, Caitlin. :-)

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  12. This is a very intriguing start and certainly makes me want to read on!

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  13. I'd feel a little apprehensive myself. I think you conveyed the uncertainty very nicely.

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  14. Most intriguing. Are the people in the settlement all dead?

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    1. Perhaps. They have to check it out. Thanks, Christiane!

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  15. Lack of communication suggests either death or faulty communication equipment. I wonder which one it is? Maybe there's someone there and they just don't have a means to signal anyone. Intriguing story so far.

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  16. Good tension and curiosity - why are they communicating?? Tweeted.

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    1. Thanks for the tweet, Daryl. They have to check on this settlement. :-)

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  17. I also suspect the reasons for noncommunication aren't very positive. I'm imagining a lone survivor, or small band of survivors.

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    1. Or worse. :-) Thanks for visiting, Carrie-Anne

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  18. Great snippet. Raises all kinds of questions. Lars sounds like a piece of work. I'm curious about him.

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    1. He really is. I reckon he must be redeemed. :-) Thanks for visiting, Diane.

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  19. Fantastic snippet! I have been MIA, so of course I have questions.

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    1. Thanks, Siren. It's good to "see" you again! :-)

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