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Sunday, March 11, 2018

Weekend Writing Warriors March 11, 2018



It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
            This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor".  Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand. He's not a slaver--and he saved Lily, sort of.  He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind. 
            They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered, and have arrived at what she thinks might be the helm of the ship she's on. Her worst nightmare is coming true. She thought she'd gotten away from the slavers, but Dev Areen has just appeared before them and Theusand and the Bulrager are having a tense exchange.


Last week's snippet ended with Dev Areen taunting: "You have no jurisdiction over me or what I do." The excerpt:


Before Theusand could respond, the Captain was beside him, looking at his feet while his nervous chatter rattled in her head. “The Bulrager filed a charge. Our team has considered it. We were legally bound to do so. To  confirm we were proceeding in a manner that would not elicit recriminations from any party involved, we contacted the council on Dhor.

“In further evidence, Dev Areen’s superiors presented clarification of the transport contract his seniors signed with us. The imprisoned Bulrager spoke the truth. This contract is worded differently. We had to let him out of lockup. He is free to move on his own deck, among his people and his property.”
 
That's it. All opinions greatly appreciated. :-) Thank you so much for visiting and for reading!

38 comments:

  1. Well, that seems like it might not be good.

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    1. Yep. Not a good turn. :-)

      Thanks for visiting, Fallon.

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  2. So, it seems Theusand really is trying to help them but is bound by contracts. Nice snippet!

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    1. He is trying to help. He's about to make a big decision. :-) Stay tuned.

      Thanks for visiting, Jessica! :-)

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  3. This seems like a very difficult situation, to say the least. The tension comes across really well in this snippet!

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    1. Thanks, Hywela! She's shaking in her shoes. :-)

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  4. Legalese is always food at making things much more difficult. Good tension there. Tweeted.

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    1. Thanks, Daryl. :-) Even out in space, legalese is a real biter. :-)

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  5. The dratted fine print in any contract will always get you! Excellent excerpt and I really wonder what will happen next!

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    1. It will! Thanks for visiting. More to come. :-)

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  6. Uh Oh - Lawyer wars - or whatever they're called in this world.

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    1. Yep. They are highly evolved species, although the Bulragers come across as unevolved, brutal monster/slavers. Thanks for visiting, Sue!

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  7. This difficulty makes me wonder why Theusand brought her here. Was he trying to confront Dev Areen or something? If so, sounds like it backfired.

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    1. Hi Ian. Thanks for visiting.

      Theusand didn't expect Dev Areen to be there. Part of this was to get Lily out into the ship to sort of desensitize her to other alien races. The other reason is that the Captain requested a conference with him to discuss a development on board. That will come out soon in the dialogue. :-)

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  8. Out on a technicality. But what does it mean for Lily? It appears that Theusand isn't as all powerful as he first seemed.

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    1. I am so glad to see that this makes readers question his power. He's facing his own crisis soon. Lily is at the core of it. Thanks for visiting, Alexis! :-)

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  9. Eeep, more trouble is one the way!

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  10. Not so great! Is Lily his property?

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    1. f she were with anyone but Theusand, she might be, but he has a conscience disguised as logic and ethics.

      Thanks for visiting, Aurora!

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  11. Great scene and great tension. But what will the Bulrager do now he's free?

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    1. Earlier in the book, Dev told Lily about his own family, his mate and his child and how another warrior killed them both. When she started to tell him she was sorry, he informed her she should save her pity. A Bulrager always gets justice even if they have to take it. He will get even. Thanks for visiting, Christiane. :-)

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  12. It's never good when someone saves you ... sort of. Poor Lily! So the Bulrager is out of lockup? Yikes.

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    1. Yeah. It is better when a heroine can save herself. But I've always been a pushover for the knight to come riding in to save the damsel in distress. lol. Theusand is a very flawed "knight" though.

      Thanks for visiting, Laura! :-)

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  13. Not good. Will Theusand be able to protect her? Curiosity will make me turn the page. Good job.

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    1. Theusand is as bad as they come. He can kill with his mind; not one to toy with. But there are more of his kind waiting at home--at the end of their journey. He does not want to make enemies out of all of them by starting a war. People (slaves)are powerful tools to be used and the Bulragers capture them and sell them, among other uses. The Dhors do not have slaves, in fact they are illegal in the Dhor'en Empire. They want no wars, no uprisings., no angering the council on Dhor.

      He's walking a fine line between two fires and Lily might be the flame that burns him to the ground.

      Thanks for visiting, Diane!

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  14. The telepathic communication makes the words rattling around the Captain's head much more meaningful.
    Dev Areen's freedom sounds like bad news for the Captain.

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    1. It is, but it will be later in the book before he learns just how bad. Thanks for visiting, Libby. :-)

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  15. That can’t be good. I’m curious to know more.

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    1. Yay! Glad to read that, Karen! Thanks for visitng. :-)

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  16. This sounds like bad news. I hope she's still be under Theusand's protection.

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    1. She is--maybe too much protection. :-)

      Thanks for visiting, Elaine! :-)

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  17. That doesn't sound like a very positive development at all! The fine print and clauses of contracts often don't have people's best interests at heart.

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    1. Excellent point, Carrie-Anne. :-) Thanks for visiting. :-)

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  18. Yeesh. Any system that supports slavery isn't a good one.

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    1. Absolutely agree. Thanks for visiting, Caitlin. :-)

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  19. I hope against hope that he doesn't have revenge or re-enslavement on his mind.

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    1. The kings of revenge--the Bulragers are. :-) Thanks for visiting, Ed!

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