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Sunday, March 4, 2018

Weekend Writing Warriors March 4, 2018



Hello, all, and welcome to March--the time of racing winds--and boy oh boy have we had those since Thursday night. 
It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
            This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". 
Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand. He's not a slaver--and he saved Lily, sort of.  He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind. 
            They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered, and have arrived at what she thinks might be the helm of the ship she's on. Her worst nightmare is coming true. Dev Areen has just appeared before her.
She thought she'd gotten away from the slavers... 
Last week's snippet ended with: " He stood tall, threw back his shoulders and stuck out his chest, striking his terrifyingly familiar pose.  The rooster." The excerpt:
He sneered at her then rested his gaze on the shadow of the Sand’s face. “You still have my slave.”
Theusand's expressionless response was silence, but it screamed louder than angry words could have. Cold filtered into her mind and it had to be coming from him.
Dev Areen crowed, “She is my property. You’ve not shown proof that she is as you say, of the I-tellekt.”
Theusand slid back his hood and locked eyes with the Bulrager.
There was no mistaking blue-black's intent when he taunted, “Stare, if you will, oh fearsome Dhor.  But do consider first, the number of witnesses here who are bound by law to testify on my behalf should you harm me. You have no jurisdiction over me or what I do.”

Well, this is all going sideways in a hurry.

That's it. All opinions greatly appreciated. :-) Thank you so much for visiting and for reading!

16 comments:

  1. Oh, lots of tension here. And poor Lily is right in the middle of it.

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  2. Yikes. This does not seem to be going well. Great snippet

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  3. Not a good time for Theusand's authority to be questioned. Worried about your heroine! Great snippet...

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  4. I hear the music from West Side Story about now. Jets and Sharks with Lily as the prize. This is getting intense! And poor Lily is privy to it all. How awful for her! I want more! great snippet!

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  5. Tense scene. Wow. Love Theusand's silent response. Poor Lily. She's got to be worried.

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  6. What a tense scene! I can’t wait to see what happens next.

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  7. I know she's in a tough spot, but I can't wait for her to show them all up! ;)

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  8. Julie Evelyn JoyceMarch 4, 2018 at 12:27 PM

    Wow, powerful dialogue! This is an excellent scene, Teresa!

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  9. Lily must be terrified. Who can she believe?

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  10. Oh, a lot of chest beating going on here. She's in quite the spot. Great scene for building tension, Teresa!

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  11. Oh no, this doesn’t look good for Lily!

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  12. Lily seems caught between the devil and the deep blue sea - although if Theusand is 'the deep blue sea' he seems a much pleasanter option than Dev Areen!

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  13. Like Hywela, I think Theusand is the better choice . Poor Lily.

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  14. Tense. Like 2 wolves circling before the fight.
    Tweeted.

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  15. Wow, this guy thinks he's in control here! But I think he's all bluster, and about to get put down. Great job building the tension!

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  16. I like the connection she has with Dhor. Good tension between the males, establishing dominance.

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