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Saturday, March 31, 2018

Weekend Writing Warriors April 1, 2018

Happy Easter--if you celebrate. Happy Passover, if you celebrate. Otherwise, happy Sunday!
It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
            This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor".  Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is with Theusand. He's not a slaver--and he saved Lily, sort of.  He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind. 
            They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered, and have arrived at what she thinks might be the helm of the ship she's on. Her worst nightmare is coming true. She thought she'd gotten away from the slavers, but Dev Areen has just appeared before them and Theusand and the Bulrager are having a tense exchange.

Last week's snippet ended with a growing war of words over slave rights while on board the ship.  "Dev Areen crowed, “Three of them vanished after you insisted the ship’s medical staff look over anyone who may have been injured.” The excerpt:
“In an illegal fight ring.”
“Illegal on your decks of the ship, permissible on mine.”
“There were dozens injured. I am bound by Dhor’en law to ensure that all occupants of this vessel are not harmed while under my watch.”
“Not my slaves; your law does not apply to them.”  
Theusand’s wall narrowed in her mind, tightening ever as he continued, excluding the bulrager. Somehow, Lily remained privy to the exchange when he asked the Captain,“Who negotiated this contract? It could be overruled if its terms are in any way unethical, or if there were irregularities in the negotiations.”
There was no mistaking the fear when the Captain raised his face and said, “The terms were set by and agreed upon by His Eminence, Lord Milsand Dhor”

Uh oh... Who is Milsand to Theusand, and how much power does he have that he can ignore Dhor'en law? That's it. All opinions greatly appreciated. :-) Thank you so much for visiting and for reading!


  1. Sounds like a mega turf war in progress here!

  2. From the captain's reaction, Theusand is someone to be reckoned with. This is a good way to convey his standing.

  3. Tense scene. These two are going to butt heads. Tweeted.

  4. This is definitely a battle of ethics. But, I wonder how this new information will affect Theusand. A great snippet! :)

  5. Dhor'en law is surely causing tension in this snippet. Hard to see if Theusand can stop it at this point. Nice snippet!

  6. Oh, sounds like His Eminence is someone not to be messed with. More trouble ahead if Thousand continues to push, I suspect.

  7. Hmm, sounds like Theusand won't be able to argue with royalty!

  8. I wonder which of them will give in? Great snippet.

  9. Will he continue to push? Tense snippet!

  10. Did someone make a mistake, or is it meant to provoke Theusand?

  11. Oooh, very tense scene. It looks like Theusand might be about to gain the upper hand!

  12. It sounds like Lord Milsand Dhor has terms that ignore prevailing laws. What a great set up for conflict that is obviously going to follow.

  13. Uh oh, I like how new wrinkles just keep appearing here. Good plot developments to ponder (and worry about over, on behalf of our heroine of course!). Great snippet!

  14. This law seems very biased towards slavers... makes me wonder what's up with this new lord.
    I missed the list, but my post's here if you want. :) WeWriWa post