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Sunday, April 8, 2018

Weekend Writing Warriors April 8, 2018






It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
            This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor".  Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is with Theusand. He's not a slaver--and he saved Lily, sort of.  He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind. 
            Lily thought she'd gotten away from the slavers, but Dev Areen (in charge of slaves) has just appeared before them and Theusand and the Bulrager are having a tense exchange.

Last week's snippet ended with: "There was no mistaking the fear when the Captain raised his face and said, “The terms were set by and agreed upon by His Eminence, Lord Milsand Dhor”.”  
This week's excerpt:



An emotional wash slammed Lily--first Theusand’s disbelief, then his anger. But it was gone as fast as she’d sensed it, giving her no  chance to understand the ramifications of this exchange. Who was this other Dhor--Milsand?  Someone she already feared.
  The Sand’s voice was a low growl when he said, “He’ll not take the female. Contract or not, it is illegal in the Dhor Klavven Dominion to enslave I-tellekti.”

“With all respect, honored one, this could cause an even greater incident than when you had him placed in lock-up without having standing to do so.”

The Sand's anger washed Lily again. Her legs shook so hard they barely held her.



That's it. All opinions greatly appreciated. :-) Thank you so much for visiting and for reading!

19 comments:

  1. Oh, so much tension. I wonder if the confrontation will move beyond words. Great snippet!

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  2. Julie Evelyn JoyceApril 8, 2018 at 10:04 AM

    Love the emotion in this excerpt, Teresa! Very nicely written. Have a great week!

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  3. Uh oh, yup going from bad to worse all right! Loved the way you conveyed the tension in all the characters! Great snippet...

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  4. Very tense. This isn't looking too good.

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  5. Tense. The bit about her leg shaking so hard from anger - great detail. Tweeted.

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  6. Having Lily's insight into his emotions adds a novel dimension to this argument. Interesting that it is mainly anger at this stage, not fear. He's being thwarted but it seems he believes his position is strong.

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  7. Yikes, poor Lily is trapped in the middle! Eek!

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  8. Excellent, tense scene. Lily is buffeted by all these emotions so she hardly knows her own. Except for fear, I assume. Wonderful snippet!

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  9. Sand obviously can't be reasoned with. What will Lilly do? Great snippet, Teresa!

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  10. Uh, oh. I'm beginning to doubt if Theusand can protect her, which I'm sure is exactly what you intended! Great snippet.

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  11. The tension builds. I'm curious to know how this will all work out.

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  12. Poor Lily, caught in the middle of something she doesn't understand. I'd be shaking too!

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  13. Wow, not only does she have to deal with her own fear, she’s got Theusand’s emotions blasting her as well!

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  14. From worse . . . to worse! So tense you can feel her fear.

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  15. Such a tension filled scene - great writing, Teresa!

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  16. Out of the pot and into the fire! Great scene you have going on here.

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  17. Is he determined to save *her* or to refuse to knuckle under to Milsand?

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  18. Clearly he doesn't have all the power here. Now I'm wondering if he can keep her safe, after all!

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