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Sunday, April 29, 2018

Weekend Writing Warriors April 29, 2018






It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
            This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor".  Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is with Theusand. He's not a slaver--and he saved Lily, sort of.  He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind. 
            The slaver, Dev Areen is demanding that Lily (he claims as his property) be returned to him. So now we have a 'test' to prove that Lily can communicate via mind to mind, therefore cannot be enslaved.

Last week's snippet ended with:
He beat me, he threatened sexual assault. He lifted me off of the ground by my hair. He…

We continue from there:


  "Her painful thoughts halted. Everyone and everything fell away from the moment, just her and Lord Sand remained in her mind. Soothing warmth flowed through her, stilling her trembling.
Theusand said, “Enough, Lily. A poor choice on my part. It was not about what he did to you; it was about demonstrating you can communicate without saying the words out loud.”
Then her head was crowded again. The Sand’s tone shifted to stern when he continued. “Captain, I am sure this demonstration met all requirements of legal proof.


That's it. All opinions greatly appreciated. :-) Thank you so much for visiting and 

for commenting!

40 comments:

  1. I definitely hope that was enough. Poor Lily.

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    1. It was for the captain, but it will never be enough for Dev Areen.

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  2. There appears to be a touch of sarcasm in his voice, just enough to hurt her. Fight back, I say. Always good reading, Teresa.
    I hope you received my whine about Linky again. HELP!

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    1. Thanks, Charmaine! I did get your message, but not until earlier this morning. Got is fixed right away then. Hugs...

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  3. Poor Lily to have to relive all that. I'm curious to know what happens next. :)

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    1. Her whole world is about to come crashing down around her, and that has nothing to do with the slaver.

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  4. I hope the captain agrees with Theusand but why do I have the feeling things won't go that easily? Really enjoyed the snippet...

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    1. The story is always so much better when things don't go easily. ;-)

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  5. Oh, the cunning old goat! His actions make more sense now. Well done.

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    1. :-) Your comment made me laugh, Ian. Cunning old goat... Too funny!

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  6. I'm sure Lily's demonstration met the requirements, but does the captain agree? I bet we're all wondering what his response will be. Neat snippet!

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    1. He does. He is afraid of Dev Areen, but even more afraid of Theusand. I think the next snippet or two will tell why.

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  7. Telling glimpse into a world where the slavery and abuse don't matter, only the fact that she can communicate telepathically.

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    1. It is telling. Dev Areen's makes his living off of capturing slaves, and then selling them. It is not permitted in Theusand's culture. But things change--and too often, not for the better.

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  8. He must be correct about legal proof, but will it be sufficient for the slaver?

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    1. Earlier in the story, the bulrager slaver Dev Areen tells Lily that when a bulrager is wronged, they always get revenge.

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  9. Julie Evelyn JoyceApril 29, 2018 at 1:39 PM

    Oh, that's clever indeed. Very nicely written, Teresa! You've weaved together quite a story here. :)

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  10. I wonder if his choice was truly a poor one. Possibly her powerful emotions helped her make her case more forcefully.

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    1. Yep. Far more than words travel mind to mind. :-)

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  11. She may have the requirements to the letter of the law, but this slaver may yet have a trick of some sort up his sleeve. I don't trust him! I hope Theusand can counter anything he may come up with. Great snippet!

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    1. He has tricks, for sure. Theusand is tough, but he is developing a chink in his armor and its name is Lily...

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  12. I don't trust Dev Avreen either. Thesesnippets are so intriguing -I want to read the book when it's out!

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    1. You are smart not to trust Dev. :-) Thanks, Hywela!

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  13. I'm sure Lily's demonstration met the requirements, but why do I have the feeling it won't be that easy.

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    1. If it were just that easy... :-)

      Challenges make for such a good story though.

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  14. Poor Lily indeed. I wonder what will happen next?

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    1. She is in a bad place. I think that lack of control of her situation would drive me crazy.

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  15. That poor woman! Have so many people in her head. Good snippet. Makes me want to know more.

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  16. I hope someone shows her kindness soon!

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    1. He will try. But her world is about to crash down around her.

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  17. Poor Lily. She still is in a hard place. I thought the snippet was very well done.

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    1. Thanks Elaine. Oh, how we torture our characters. :-)

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  18. This must be incredibly hard to deal with. Great portrayal of her feelings!

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  19. He wasn't winning any points with me, but the way he reassures her got him one point. ;)

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  20. Great snippet and the story sounds so intriguing!

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  21. Oh my. Just with those few sentences you've build a cool story world, or a snatch of one. Love it!

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