Week 18: "Why a Sword?" continued
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Set up This scene takes place in the first one third of the book and continues immediately after last week's post. Rissa and her Rialtan protector Jia, are on a world called Amun populated by an all female colony led by a woman named Shaynda. They've been given refuge here from Daekartha. The residents are considered outlaws in the Rialtan Empire. This is Rissa's earliest exposure on how to use a sword, and she's not taking it seriously at all. A mster swordstress (yeah, I know--I'm making up words ) has just begun to school her.
I'll pull from this for several weeks, continuous.
"Rissa was dumbstruck. If her expression conveyed any questions, it didn't matter, because Shaynda was done answering them.
Stepping around her, the swordstress grabbed her from behind, her hard muscles pressed snug against Rissa's back. Powerful hands slid from Rissa's narrow shoulders down her sweaty arms to her wrists, then over her hands, forming them into a two-handed hold around the sword's pommel. "Keep your grip fluid, not too tight, not too loose, just like that. Good." Over and over, Shaynda guided her through correct motions of combat moves. There was no mercy, no let up."
I'll continue in this scene, next week. :-)
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