Welcome Warriors, and Snipsuns. So glad you could stop by for a visit. :-) August already? Sure sounds like it outside my window. The birds are quiet but the locusts and cicadas are loud.
Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
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The travelers are now on the boat that is taking them upriver into the Firce Mountains. :-) We are still in Kad's POV.
The sun was high enough that it cleared hilltops, shining part
way down the mountainsides of the river gorge. The course wound back and forth,
the hills reaching higher with each passing mile. Along wide bends, exposed
layers of rock strata told an ancient tale. And where the river narrowed, there
were long, straight stretches of nearly vertical rock walls.
Wiley pointed at rock
spires dotting the gorge on either side. “My cathedrals. I talk to my Maker
when I go by. Ain’t no worship place more real and fitting than out here on the
water and under the sky.”
Tayden asked, “And does your Maker ever answer you?”
You'll have to tune in next week and the week after to hear Wiley's answer about his Maker answering him.
That's it. What works, what doesn't?
That's it. What works, what doesn't?
A local "wide river bend" for your viewing pleasure.
Thanks for visiting!
Fantastic descriptions. I could picture it easily. :)
ReplyDeleteOh, those are good words to read, Heather. Thank you!
DeleteWhat Heather said: vivid, beautiful descriptions. Nicely done, Teresa!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Steven! :-)
DeleteDoes he? Pulled me in, nice excerpt!
ReplyDeleteYou ask the right question, Gemma! Thanks :-)
DeleteSounds like palisades. Well written scene and you described it clear as a bell.
ReplyDeleteI have a suggestion for the answer to the ending question, "“And does your Maker ever answer you?”
HERE: "Yes, my maker often responds to requests with, 'No.'"
Thanks, Chip! :-)
DeleteI agree. Sometimes we don't get the answer we seek. but an answer it is, nonetheless.
I like the feeling of peace here, I can see why it's his cathedrals.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Linda :-)
DeleteYou pulled me in with the first sentence and never let go. I've known peace on the water and terror. Beautiful. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Charmaine. I've known peace, and perhaps fear. Never terror. :-)
DeleteLove all the detail in your descriptions:)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Eleri! :-)
Deleteooooh, LOVE that description, so beautiful !!
ReplyDeleteThanks, EE! :-)
DeleteOoh, love this and Wiley's comment! He's rapidly becoming one of my favorite people...great 8!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Veronica. Wiley was to be an insignificant character. In the rough draft, he didn't even have a name. I think he wants the spotlight, lol.
DeleteLovely! I was caught up in the visuals until the end when Tayden commented, and I was struck by what a perfect question that is, especially coming from him. :D
ReplyDeleteWoot! Thanks, Marcia! :-)
DeleteWonderful description and a Wiley's observation is fitting as is Tayden's question. Can't wait for the answer!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elyzabeth! :-)
DeleteA beautiful and dangerous setting. One of the things I love about fantasy/SF is that when a question like that is asked, the answer can be just about anything. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteSo true, Alexis! :-) Thanks for visiting.
DeleteI really like this snippet. You have a wonderful way of describing the land and the voice of the character is fun and natural. Well done.
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Thank you for the encouraging words, Joyce. :-)
DeleteLovely the way you've worked in the geology of the region.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sue Ann!! :-)
DeleteI agree with Wiley, but would love to know the answer to Tayden's question. :D Great snippet, Teresa.
ReplyDelete:-) It's coming, Siobhan! Thanks for visiting. :-)
DeleteThis is simply gorgeous, Teresa. Peaceful and beautiful, and so matter of fact that it rings like a bell. Lovely!
ReplyDelete:-D <-- big smile. Thanks, Sarah! :-)
DeleteI like the description of the setting. Sounds like a good spot for a vacation. :D
ReplyDeleteIt does, huh? :-) Thanks for visiting, Frank. Good to see you!
DeleteYour detail here is wonderful. I can see the place from your description of it.
ReplyDeleteGreat! Thanks, Elaine :-)
DeleteAs always beautiful description. Looking forward to Wiley's answer.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Tina! :-)
DeleteWonderful imagery! And I love the last question. Sure hoping we'll get the answer. :) Hint...hint...
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen. You've put a big smile on my face. Yep...answer in the next week or two. :-)
DeleteLovely evocative scene with rich dialogue. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Gem! :-)
DeleteThis is great. I love your word painting here. The description is so vivid. And I really want the answer to that question. :)
ReplyDeleteOne of those conundrums. :-) Thanks for visiting, Kimberly. :-)
DeleteGuhhh. Teresa, you paint such a beautiful picture. You make me want to put on my shoes and run outside and get lost in nature. Wonderful work!
ReplyDeleteAwe, thanks, Evelyn! :-)
DeleteOooh, I love this. What a beautiful scene. And the dialogue shows so much about both characters, in two lines. Very well done :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Victoria! :-)
DeleteI love this! Love the scene and the conversation between the characters. And that ending line - just delicious! Great snippet and I look forward to reading more.
ReplyDelete:-) <-- Very big smile. Thanks!
DeleteI love Wiley's cathedrals and worship place, and I can't wait to hear his answer to Tayden's question! He's so flipping adorable!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Millie--you're a sweetie. :-)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful descriptions of the rocks and the river. I'm intrigued by the answer to the question, too!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elaine. :-)
DeleteI like it especially the imagery from this: "And where the river narrowed, there were long, straight stretches of nearly vertical rock walls." Maybe because I live in MO and we have some of those.
ReplyDeleteCool! Thanks for visiting, Teresa :-)
DeleteYou're really good with setting details. I could see the outdoors like I was there with them on the boat :)
ReplyDeleteKeep smiling,
Yawatta
Thanks, Yawatta. :-)
DeleteI think my favourite line would have to be "...exposed layers of rock strata told an ancient tale." Just has a nice ring to it! Beautiful descriptions and I'm curious as to what his answer will be.
ReplyDeleteThanks! :-)
ReplyDeleteI fully understand Wiley's perspective, and I love Tayden's question :D
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ian! How goes the vacation? :-)
ReplyDeleteI wish I were there - anywhere near the sea (or a river or a pond or a creek) Is heavenly to me!
ReplyDeletePlease share your post at http://image-in-ing.blogspot.com/2014/08/variations-with-linky.html
Thanks, Sue. WIll bookmark your site for next week. :-)
DeleteSometimes the best house of worship doesn't have four walls. It reminds me of the famous Thomas Paine quote, "My own mind is my own church."
ReplyDeleteExcellent quote, Carrie-Anne! Thanks for visiting. :-)
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