I Hope all the Nano participants are getting it done. :-) And since it's the week we're reminded to take a little time to think about our blessings, I want to add that one of the many things I am grateful for is the group of incredible, generous writers and readers who stop here week after week to give me encouragement, crits, and food for thought. A big Thanksgiving hug to each and every one of you. <3
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Now, down to business. :-) Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
Set up: The MC was vanished without a trace for two years, then returned "without a trace" too. She'd been found in the desert alone after having just given birth. She was investigated for foul play in the disappearance of her newborn.
In today's snippet, Marissa is meeting with her counselor, Rayanne. Last week, the reader was looking at prints hanging on the walls of Rayanne's office--through Marissa's eyes. The last sentence was:
Now, down to business. :-) Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
Set up: The MC was vanished without a trace for two years, then returned "without a trace" too. She'd been found in the desert alone after having just given birth. She was investigated for foul play in the disappearance of her newborn.
In today's snippet, Marissa is meeting with her counselor, Rayanne. Last week, the reader was looking at prints hanging on the walls of Rayanne's office--through Marissa's eyes. The last sentence was:
" Tiny shirts and blankets were blowing in a breeze, and
clouds dotted a pale blue sky just below the gilded frames."
A
perfect scene in a perfect life; all was right. A wind was blowing without a
care, and there was a child somewhere in that world, in the life of the lucky person
who'd pinched the clothespins over child size clothing. Sadness
tugged at Marissa as she gazed at it. Could she ever have such a perfect life?
"Penny for your thoughts, Marissa?"
When she answered, her voice sounded flat to her own ears. "I don't think they're worth even a penny today." Her wonderful mood, the skip in her step, all left behind with the shadows hiding from the sun in an art print.
That's it. What works. What doesn't?
My wish for you all this Thursday, that you don't have to work, that the food is good, that you're surrounded by people you love and who love you in return.
My wish for you all this Thursday, that you don't have to work, that the food is good, that you're surrounded by people you love and who love you in return.
Wild turkeys in the field above our house at the end of day. Time to roost. :-)
Melancholy, emotional and poetic. Your writing never fails to stir, Teresa -- great job!
ReplyDelete~grins~ Thanks, Steven! :-)
DeleteHer despair is so obvious in this snippet. Great job touching the reader's emotional core.
ReplyDeleteHave a wonderful Thanksgiving.
Thanks, Chelle! That's good to know. :-)
DeleteThat last line is perfect, Teresa. A heartbreaking description of everyone's darker thoughts.
ReplyDelete:-) ! Thanks, Sarah :-)
DeleteI felt Marissa's sadness, especially when she replies to the counselor. Great emotional punch in this snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Frank! :-)
DeleteThis whole scene, I think, is going to really move readers. I don't see anything worth changing. Each word is carefully chosen and together, make a big impact. Kudos!
ReplyDelete:-) <--- Very big smile.
DeleteGreat writing! Loved how the character viewed the clothespin.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Patricia. I'm so glad you noticed a small detail. It helps me decide what stays, what goes... :-)
DeleteGreat job of pulling us into the seemingly idyllic world of the print and using it to expose Marissa's darker emotions. Excellent snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis. Your comments always mean so much. :-)
DeleteHer anguish is so palpable. I hope she finds some peace eventually.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Carrie-Anne :-)
DeleteVery compelling snippet today. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Lashell! :-)
DeleteOh ouch! So poignant in light of her lost baby. This was really beautifully done!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christina. :-)
DeleteBeautifully written - just beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Gemma!
DeleteI'm blown away by this snippet, your writing simple yet powerful enough to touch the readers heart. A painting brings this woman to her knees for what she's lost.
ReplyDeleteThank you, dear Teresa.
Best wishes to you and your loved ones for all the wonders in your lives.
Thanks, Charmaine! I hope your Thanksgiving is wonderful, too. :-)
DeletePowerful snippet indeed and very believable that the picture would evoke such emotions in your heroine. I can't wait to find out what actually happened to her. Another excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteWoot! Thanks, Veronica :-)
DeleteLove that "penny for your thoughts" reply. Gosh, such an emotional eight! I really, really love this story Teresa! Great work, x that. Phenomenal work! xo
ReplyDeleteThanks, Neva! :-)
DeleteOh, the poor girl. She's in such pain. Well done. You made me care about her.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elaine :-) I'm so glad you're a bit invested in her character. :-)
DeleteSad snippet. Her pain is very real. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Gem! :-)
DeleteI felt her fall low, made me a little sad too. You tugged on my heartstrings. A flock of wild turkeys was hanging out behind my backyard today too. Hubby said, " dumb guys, don't they know how close it is to Thanksgiving?"
ReplyDelete:-) Thanks, Millie. Haha! Re: Turkeys. Your hubby is right! They must not know how close it is.
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