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Sunday, May 10, 2015

Weekend Writing Warriors: May 10, 2015

Hello all. Happy Mothers Day!  <--- That applies to you whether your babies have two legs or four. :-) 

A quick reminder, we now officially allow up to ten sentences. Yay! The flip side of that is when a moderator checks your post--if you've gone over ten sentences, your link will be removed from the linky list-- without giving notice. So let's all stay ten and under. :-) Even one word sentences count if the punctuation brings it to a full stop.

On to fun things :-)

             Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
                 Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE  





This is Chapter 3 from my SFR WIP, Across The Night Sky  . The chapter I've been pulling from ended last week. Moving on to the next chapter... No set up. I'm just going to see if you--the readers- follow what's going on. :-)
My Eight:


 

"On Tazulta, Kuylrh’s guard scrambled to the shuttle, secured all weapons, and ran pre-launch checks faster than they’d ever done them. Abraxum kept his voice calm while he issued order after order. No use letting these young men know just how alarmed he was. 
"This was the most terrifying moment of his life, and it could do nothing but get worse until he righted this. His young King had been taken, plucked away from before his eyes. For the first time in all his long years, panic threatened to engulf him. A silent prayer kept repeating over and over in his mind, a mantra staving off his growing dread: Please dear Giver, make us fast enough to reach him in time."
That's it. What works. What doesn't?  I'm grateful for every comment you leave. :-)

18 comments:

  1. Yikes...I wonder if he might've been taken by - well, I don't know - a woman? Suitable for marriage, perhaps? Or am I all wrong here...?

    I'm so glad I counted my one-words as sentences this week. =)

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  2. I am sure this has something to do with our mysterious lady of last week. Can't wait to find out.

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  3. Wow, great tension, Teresa! Now I need to go and read last week's snippet to see if I can gather a clue here... ;D

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  4. So much packed into those few sentences! With some polishing it will be great.

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  5. Ah! my whole comment disappeared! "His young King had been taken, plucked away from before his eyes." Love this sentence, it really pulled me in. The entire piece is full of intrigue and tension. Nicely done! Happy Mother's Day/Four legged Mother's Day to you also! xo

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  6. I'm glad to see what's happening with those left behind. It gives me hope for a rescue. (so blog spot sure is being persnickety lately. Hope I didn't post this seventeen times!)

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  7. I like the prayer at the end. Praying is a good thing in this situation, and I hope Giver will listen.

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  8. Oh cool, for some reason I thought he was already beyond any hep from his men so this is good. Excellent excerpt!

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  9. So great that you're showing both sides, Teresa! Their desperation really tightens the tension. :)

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  10. Wonderful build up of tension! I can feel the fear.

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  11. I've missed Abraxum and here he is. Wonderful snippet with urgency and the prayer tops it all.

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  12. Ah, the fun of pretending you're not panicking, when everyone knows you are!

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  13. The tension is escalating. Well done.

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  14. Well done, a very intense scene.

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  15. Hi, Teresa. I don't know the story here yet, but ... tension, oh, there is definitely tension.

    The only thing that confused me were the quotes on the outside of the snippet. Perhaps that's something with how Blogger shows a blockquote (been a long time since I used my Blogger blog)... Anyway, it made me think this was being told to someone after the fact, which numbed the tension some... as in "we already know the ending"

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  16. tense scene. you can feel his dread

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  17. That's a pretty frightening situation. I hope they're able to get there in time for a successful rescue.

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