Weekend Writing Warriors April 30, 2017

Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)!  Happy end of April. Time truly is flying!

  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
                This week's snippet from *name change alert* Dhor'en Sands (it might still change again):  Lily is following Theusand. They've just gone down a set of steps. It's the first time (in weeks) she's leaving the floor she's been on since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship.  The last line last week was. “ There was no set leading up, so they went the only direction they could, down." 

Here we go...

At the bottom, after Theusand did his magic hand thing to open the door, they stepped  into a hallway just as gray as the stairwell, but at least better lit. A few people walked by, their gazes dropping toward their feet as they passed. Great. She was with the man who scared them into floor-ogling  She wished she could blend in with the walls.

“Stand tall. Become your destiny,” he said.

Destiny? What was the almighty Lord Sand talking about now? Memories of Ben and the girls jumped to the forefront, reminding her that her precious little family had always been, and still were her true destiny.

  What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

  A short note about sidebar promos.  :-) Sidebar promos spots are available at no cost as a perk of regularly participating in Weekend Writing Warriors. If you're interested, all we need is an email from you that includes the link to the Amazon page of the book you'd like to see on our sidebar. Our email address is: wewriwa at yahoo dot com

Weekend Writing Warriors April 23, 2017

Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)!

  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
                This week's snippet:  Starting a new chapter which follows immediately after Lily has pushed Theusand nearly to his breaking point. She's backed off now, and is obediently doing as he says--  The last line last week was. “She followed, half a step behind." 

Here we go...

In complete contradiction to his behavior just moments before, he walked at a leisurely pace like they were two old friends out for a stroll. They stopped in front of a door that had previously been locked. She knew. She’d tried to open it. It was important to know which routes were blocked in case an escape opportunity arose.

It probably remained padlocked to her, but the Sand’s magic hand waved in front of a scanner and the door opened, revealing stairs. Dimly lit, they’d still be gray in any light. There was no set leading up, so they went the only direction they could, down.  

  What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

  A short note about sidebar promos.  :-) Sidebar promos spots are available at no cost as a perk of regularly participating in Weekend Writing Warriors. If you're interested, all we need is an email from you that includes the link to the Amazon page of the book you'd like to see on our sidebar. Our email address is: wewriwa at yahoo dot com

Weekend Writing Warriors April 9, 2017

Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)!FYI, we will have our regular posting next week on Easter Sunday. For those of you who will be busy with family and Easter traditions next week--I hope you have a good, holiday weekend--and I hope the Easter bunny finds you and brings you lots of chocolate. :-). 

For those who celebrate it, Happy Passover. :-)

  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
                This week's snippet:  Moving ahead in my WIP, jumping many chapters to give you a glimpse of the male MC--a very complex soul. He is alien, capable of reading minds, and incredibly self-disciplined.  Lily is angry--and directing it at him. He's about had his fill of it, dealing with this emotional human.  The last line last week was spoken by Lily. “Or maybe you just don’t have any feelings,” she accused.  

Here we go...

He stopped walking and spun on her. Grabbing her shoulders, he came against her, pinning her to the wall. He lowered his mouth next to her ear. His voice, barely above a whisper, matched the icy coldness in his eyes when he said,“You don’t want to see my emotions. I am not sure you would like me after you have seen me lose control.”

Lily swallowed. Fear replaced any desire she had for a fight. There’d been an edge to his voice, a warning she was going to heed, at least for the time being.

He straightened, backed away from her, and continued on. She followed, half a step behind.

Don't worry. Lily is smart enough to pick her battles. This one wasn't worth the fight. That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

  A short note about sidebar promos.  :-) Sidebar promos spots are available at no cost as a perk of regularly participating in Weekend Writing Warriors. If you're interested, all we need is an email from you that includes the link to the Amazon page of the book you'd like to see on our sidebar. Our email address is: wewriwa at yahoo dot com

Weekend Writing Warriors April 2, 2017

Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! Happy April!  First, a short note about sidebar promos.  :-) Sidebar promos spots are available at no cost as a perk of regularly participating in Weekend Writing Warriors. If you're interested, all we need is an email from you that includes the link to the Amazon page of the book you'd like to see on our sidebar. Our email address is: wewriwa at yahoo dot com

  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
                This week's snippet:  Moving ahead in my WIP, jumping many chapters to give you a glimpse of the male MC--a very complex soul. He is alien, capable of reading minds, and Lily has just had an argument with one of his Chays (sort of like monks. They care for him and help with his task on the ship.) The argument was ugly, and Theusand disciplined his Chay upon his return to his quarters. In case you don't recall, this is Lord Sand, and no one may gaze upon his icy blue eyes without first being invited by him to do so. He's just explained where she should walk--relative to him "one half step behind". She is dealing with enraged thoughts--in front of a mind reader.  He is about to make her even angrier. He speaks first. The last line last week was, "She wanted to scream.”

“Lily, calm.”

Stepping in front of him, she blocked his way. She planted her feet and glared at the shadow of his face, daring him to reprimand her.  “Lily, calm.” Her words came out in the most mocking tone she could muster.

When no reply or reaction came, his silence enraged her. Now she was looking for a fight, for a solid, mean, clear-the-air-go-round. Was there no way to get emotion out of him?

“Emotion would have no positive outcome right now.”

           “Or maybe you just don’t have emotions,” she accused.

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Next week she'll get the reaction she's been taunting him for. This scene is not over... That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.