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Sunday, April 23, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors April 23, 2017



Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)!



  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
                This week's snippet:  Starting a new chapter which follows immediately after Lily has pushed Theusand nearly to his breaking point. She's backed off now, and is obediently doing as he says--  The last line last week was. She followed, half a step behind." 
Here we go...




In complete contradiction to his behavior just moments before, he walked at a leisurely pace like they were two old friends out for a stroll. They stopped in front of a door that had previously been locked. She knew. She’d tried to open it. It was important to know which routes were blocked in case an escape opportunity arose.
It probably remained padlocked to her, but the Sand’s magic hand waved in front of a scanner and the door opened, revealing stairs. Dimly lit, they’d still be gray in any light. There was no set leading up, so they went the only direction they could, down.  

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27 comments:

  1. I love the contradictory atmosphere you've created: a friendly stroll, but leading to grey staircase going down, down, down.

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  2. Where oh where is this staircase leading. Scary snippet as if all the others in this story have been a fairy tale. YIKES! You're leading us down, down, down.

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  3. It's intriguing that maybe he does care. And I like how you reveal that she's already tried to find an escape route. And you left me curious to know where that staircase leads. Well done! :)

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  4. I'd be a little hesitant to follow him down those stairs.

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  5. Well, I guess any new information about her environment is good to know--as she said, she might need to know what was open and what not, but doing down a dim set of stairs would be pretty freaky with an alien, no matter how you cut it. Nice sense of foreboding here.

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  6. The story just keeps getting more interesting as you add the details, like this spooky staircase! Enjoyed the excerpt.

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  7. She seems to be doing a good job of keeping her eye on escape rather than giving in. Thanks for sharing!

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  8. I like that her observations are purposeful rather than aimless. And "down" always seems ominous, doesn't it? :)

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  9. How did she manage to try the doors? Did she escape briefly?

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    1. She has free roam of the Sand's quarters on the ship. :-)

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  10. Lol, I agree with Botanist. Down always seems more ominous than up.

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  11. She's on the ball and very observant. I worry, though, what might be behind that locked door.

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    1. :-) Might not be good... Thanks, Elaine.

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  12. Locked doors are always fun. What mystery awaits down there? Great snippet!

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  13. You are leading us into a scary situation. She's quite observant. She'll find her way out, I'm sure.

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    1. She's a survivor. Bad times ahead--she will be tested. :-)

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  14. I love how she's so keenly aware of her surroundings; every moment is a possible chance to escape. So much great tension in this story!

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    1. Her heart is willing, but she's just not finding the opportunity. :-)

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  15. I'm curious to know where those steps lead. I like that she's so aware of her surroundings. Great imagery.

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  16. Where are they going? Why was the door closed before? Why did he decided to open it now? So many questions! Can't wait to read more!

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    1. I'm glad it made you ask questions! Thanks, Elyzabeth!

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