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Saturday, April 1, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors April 2, 2017






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  It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.  
                This week's snippet:  Moving ahead in my WIP, jumping many chapters to give you a glimpse of the male MC--a very complex soul. He is alien, capable of reading minds, and Lily has just had an argument with one of his Chays (sort of like monks. They care for him and help with his task on the ship.) The argument was ugly, and Theusand disciplined his Chay upon his return to his quarters. In case you don't recall, this is Lord Sand, and no one may gaze upon his icy blue eyes without first being invited by him to do so. He's just explained where she should walk--relative to him "one half step behind". She is dealing with enraged thoughts--in front of a mind reader.  He is about to make her even angrier. He speaks first. The last line last week was, "
She wanted to scream.”

“Lily, calm.”
Stepping in front of him, she blocked his way. She planted her feet and glared at the shadow of his face, daring him to reprimand her.  “Lily, calm.” Her words came out in the most mocking tone she could muster.
When no reply or reaction came, his silence enraged her. Now she was looking for a fight, for a solid, mean, clear-the-air-go-round. Was there no way to get emotion out of him?
“Emotion would have no positive outcome right now.”
           “Or maybe you just don’t have emotions,” she accused.
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Next week she'll get the reaction she's been taunting him for. This scene is not over... That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

21 comments:

  1. She's playing with fire. Hope she doesn't get burned.

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  2. Can't wait to watch the fireworks, Teresa. This interaction is so true to life. I can feel her frustration.

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  3. I'm curious to know how he will react to her outburst. Maybe he will surprise her.

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  4. He is tolerating her insult. I'm looking forward to the outburst.

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  5. Nifty scene with her taunting him. Is it next week already? Shh. Send me the next part. I promise not to tell.

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  6. Oh, the tension is rising! I love it! We always wish some people could read our minds without having to tell them our problems, but it seems more infuriating in this case.

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  7. yeah, telling someone to calm down doesn't usually have the intended effect. Great snippet

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  8. The harder he tries to not have emotion, the more she'll attempt to set him off, I'm guessing, so I hope she can handle whatever happens! Intriguing excerpt.

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  9. Hope she's ready to handle what she'd provoking! Nice clip, Teresa!

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  10. He doesn't have any emotions? Hah! She's liable to get more than she bargained for. Good snippet!

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  11. She's provoking him. And he can read her thoughts. Does she really believe she can defy him unscathed?

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  12. Thank goodness no one can read my mind! And telling someone to calm down, usually has the opposite effect. Great snippet.

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  13. Getting into a fist-fight probably wouldn't be all that productive. But he's clearly used to people who do what he says, which wouldn't work for me, either!

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  14. If she does manage to stir his emotions, I don't think she's going to enjoy the results. Great snippet.

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  15. I feel her frustration. Nothing worse than being in the mood for a fight and your opponent refuses to go along, and worse, is all Zen about it!

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  16. Oh, Snap. Of course, after being talked to like that, I probably wouldn't do better.

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  17. I somehow think she's going to get her wish and she's not going to like it at all. Great tension. I'm so afraid for Lily!

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  18. I know she's in peril, but honestly, I'm loving her sass. :D

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