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Saturday, March 14, 2015

Weekend Writing Warriors: March 15, 2015

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
                 Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE   


This is Chapter 2 from my SFR WIP, ATNS, called "The Hunter"  where we're introduced to the male main character, Kuylrh--second in line to the throne in the Rialtan Empire.  They're preparing for a hunt on a remote world called Tazulta.  Kuylrh has just finished a short prayer.

Last week's 8 ended with this:
"Then he stepped back into his hiding place with his back pressed against the rock." 
We pick up from there:

"His thoughts swirled as they had for months now. This hunt on Tazulta was a deserved celebration. The more he thought about it, though, this celebration wasn't exactly anomalous; there had been a whole, long string of them. And he guessed that was at the root of his grandfather’s anger.
            But in this situation, who wouldn’t have done the same? Too soon he’d be forced to take a mate and do his duty for the throne. Celebration my ass."


 
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42 comments:

  1. I hope he can relax and enjoy the hunt, instead of being so preoccupied by heavier thoughts. And maybe he'll like his future mate.

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    1. Thanks, Carrie-Anne. I think he will.

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  2. wow, terrific line "Too soon he’d be forced to take a mate and do his duty for the throne. Celebration my ass." I guess he almost feels like his life (as he knows it) is ending. Great 8.

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    1. Yes! That's exactly how he feels. I'm so glad you got that, Chelle. :-)

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  3. He doesn't sound thrilled about taking a mate.

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    1. Not too much. Thanks for visiting, Cara. :-)

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  4. On the brink of manhood, it's time for him to step up. The transition hurts and you've set the tone of being pushed by grandfather into robes he doesn't wish to wear right now. Just like today's kids and throughout antiquity.

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    1. All so true, Charmaine! Thanks for visiting. :-)

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  5. You've done a wonderful job of highlighting the difficulty of making the male transition. What a difficult situation. Wonderfully crafted as ever, Teresa.

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  6. I like the hook about him taking a mate. It makes me curious about his place in the world and what's coming up for him:)

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  7. I love his derision and frustration. Great snippet, Teresa. :)

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  8. I like getting a glimpse of the reason behind the tension between the men and also a view of what's looming in Kuylrh's future. Another great snippet!

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    1. A challenging path. :-) Thanks for visiting, Alexis!

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  9. You can really feel his reluctance to settle down just yet and conform to what will be expected of him. Good for him I say!

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    1. Haha! He's about to be taken down, and he's gonna like it. ;-) Thanks, Gemma!

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  10. Love it! Forced to take a mate.No love there.Can't wait to see what kind of gal will change his mind ;-)

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    1. Haha! An alien to him, but incredibly human. :-) Thanks for visiting, Sara. :-)

      So good to see you back!

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  11. "Celebration my ass" - love it! Familial duty is always such a great source of conflict :)

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    1. It sure can be, lol. Thanks for visiting, Ian!

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  12. Clearly, he's frustrated with the pressure to perform. Well done.

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    1. Yes, he is. Thanks for visiting, Patricia!

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  13. I love the emotions and his lack of control over things in this snippet. However, there is something that bugs me about the first sentence, but I don't know what. I guess it feels jarring when compared to your normal writing voice.

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    1. Definitely taking this comment to heart, Jess. I'll be giving that another look-over (probably several).

      Thanks for catching that!

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  14. So he's been doing a tad too much celebrating, eh? I understand the motivations though, thanks to your snippet. Terrific!

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  15. Sowing (or hunting down) those last few wild oats., huh? :)

    Looks like i missed my guess about what was going on---but I like this better, Teresa!

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    1. I'm glad you like it better, Sarah! Thanks for visiting. :-)

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  16. Is he also unhappy about being forced to take a mate? Love the last line! Great snippet!

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    1. Yes. Unhappy because he's searched, and he's failed to fond the right woman. Thanks, Dani!

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  17. I like the smooth flow of his thoughts - a great snippet that shows a character's attitude and voice.

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  18. He doesn't seemed to happy at being forced to choose a mate. lol Enjoyed the snippet!

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  19. Uh oh. I doubt he wants Grandpa to be angry with him. He seems reluctant to settle down, and like everyone else, I like that last line. Great as always.

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    1. Yep. It's all spinning out of control for him...right about now. :-)

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  20. So he's a party animal, huh? And doesn't want a wife to crimp his style. Men are so the same no matter the planet. LOL Great snippet!

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    1. Till now. :-) That's about to change. :-)

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  21. forced marriages/matings, love this!

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