Weekend Writing Warriors: April 12, 2015

                    My most humble apologies if I didn't get to your blog last week. I was unexpectedly busy. I will make it around today. :-)

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
                 Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE  

This is Chapter 2 from my SFR WIP, Across The Night Sky  where we're introduced to the male main character, Kuylrh--second in line to the throne in the Rialtan Empire.  The previously posted hunting scenes now segue into his meeting with the female MC. Final sentence last Sunday was: "He was vaguely aware of crashing sounds and  screams, but they sounded so far away, like he was hearing them through water."

"Even in his confusion, he processed the grim noises: groaning metal and cries of alarm, running footsteps, growling and snarling, a shrill scream abruptly halted and replaced by gurgling noises. He didn't have to see them to know; the abzions were running wild, breaking down walls and eating whatever or whoever couldn’t get away from them.  

The specimens on board, all taken against their will. Giver above—and now he was one of them. He'd soon enough be dead if he couldn’t find cover or at the very least, his weapon. He pushed against the floor in a fruitless attempt to stand. The rusted wall, the darkness, a dim blinking light above where he struggled all started doing a slow spin around him. He collapsed, closing his eyes to the dizzying pain."

That's it. What works. What doesn't? I'm grateful for every comment you leave. :-)