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A collection of snippets of the books I write and, occasionally, my life and the things that inspire my writing...

Sunday, November 15, 2015

Weekend Writing Warriors November 15, 2015

 Hello all.  Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, a weekly bloghop.  If you're doing Nano, yay you! I'm not, but I'm cheering you on. :-)
        Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 

              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
              This is the start of Chapter 5 from my SFR WIP, Across The Night Sky . We're almost there--help is on the way. I might have to torture them for a bit, first. lol. Seriously, what happens is essential to the plot. My last snippet ended with this: "It was Kuylrh who was watching her, not one of those wild animals eyeing her up for its next meal..    Creative punctuation alert. 

We continue from there :



He’d lost the dazed look in his eyes, and his breathing no longer sounded like he fought for every breath. The other survivors came closer. When they were near enough to see Kuylrh in the dim light, their words were whispers and they bowed their heads. It was almost like they were in the presence of a god.  They kept saying the word "A’Niaz”.

She smiled, but didn't let down her guard. Their speechless communication came through loud and clear; they needed each other to survive. 
Someone's stomach growled. The rumbling could have belonged to anyone in the group; they were all desperate for food and water. And everyone knew that desperate people were not to be trusted.

 That's it. What works? What doesn't? I'm so very grateful for any comment or criticism you share. :-)

Saturday, November 7, 2015

Weekend Writing Warriors November 8, 2015



Hello all.  Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, a weekly bloghop.  If you're doing Nano, yay you! I'm not, but I'm cheering you on. :-)
        Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 

              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
              This is the start of Chapter 5 from my SFR WIP, Across The Night Sky . We're almost there--help is on the way. I might have to torture them for a bit, first. lol. Seriously, what happens is essential to the plot. My last snippet ended with this: "“The really funny thing is,  you’d never imagine you weren’t even on God’s green Earth.."       

Creative punctuation alert. 

 

We continue from there :



Something woke Rissa. She lay still, listening to shuffling and shifting noises. Where were they coming from?  Out in the darkness, something breathed, probably one of the animals that kept attacking them. The snoring nearby didn't frighten her; she figured it was one of the people in her group. 
The hair on the back of her neck stood up. Weird...was she being watched? Careful not to make any quick moves, she looked around. She didn’t realize she’d been holding her breath until she exhaled. It was Kuylrh who was watching her, not one of those wild animals eyeing her up for its next meal.
 That's it. What works? What doesn't? I'm so very grateful for any comment or criticism you share. :-)

Note* Elaine Cantrell missed the sign up deadline. She does have a post up. Its here at Elaine Cantrell