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Saturday, October 29, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors October 30, 2016

Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-)


Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA)  Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found  HERE.               

This week's snippet: We're back to our main character,  Lily.  After Earth's invasion, she was captured by the wasp-like alien (Bulrager) slavers. She caught the attention of one of their military leaders who has forced her to go with him to another place in the ship. She's just realized that she is at a fighting ring.  Last week's snippet ended with this: "Trying to will away her fear was useless; it was here to stay."

We continue from there...



"Like so many times in the last couple of months when she’d been outnumbered or cornered, she told herself, “It’s not a good day to die.” Really, though, what day was? Her thoughts went to Ben and the girls—and the only way she’d ever get to see them again. If it took everything she had, she needed to come out of this with at least a shred of life left in her.
She watched the Bulrager guards bring in four men. There was no way they were from Earth--not the way their jaws jutted out even farther than their noses. But just like humans, they were small compared to the monsters waiting in the ring.

Dev Areen grabbed her hair and pulled her to the wall. A Bulrager lowered a ladder and blue-black shoved her in front of him then pointed at the bottom rungs. “Climb.”        



 That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.

22 comments:

  1. I am sitting on the edge of my seat, wondering what is going to happen to Lilly. What could Dev Areen want of her in this situation.
    Awesome story, Teresa!

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  2. I am sitting on the edge of my seat, wondering what is going to happen to Lilly. What could Dev Areen want of her in this situation.
    Awesome story, Teresa!

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  3. Hmm, so she's not expected to fight? I wonder what they want her for? Ack, I want to read more! :)

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  4. Don't leave us hanging, Teresa!! Love your heroine. "What day was?"

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  5. Climb? To where? Good ending. A cliffhanger. Well done, Teresa.

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  6. But now what?? You keep upping the tension in this story! I like her determination to stay alive though I suspect that will be sorely tested in future chapters!

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  7. Well, at least it looks like she's not fighting in this round, but does that make her the prize? Eeep!

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  8. You're keeping me guessing where this scene is going!

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  9. Sounds like a temporary reprieve, then, but Dev Areen clearly has something in mind for her!

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  10. I love her determination, but boy do you keep cranking up the tension!

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  11. I puzzled about a fight ring aboard a space ship, although I guess they were in there for extended periods, unlike a short plane journey for example. Sounds very tense and can't wait to find out what are Dev's intentions for her.

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  12. I knew that creep had to have some kind of plan. Still not exactly sure what it is... but I bet she's not going to like it!

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  13. Where are they climing to? Great snippet

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  14. Even being a spectator at this event sounds grueling but better than being in the arena! A fascinating story, great snippet yet again...

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  15. I'm curious to where this is going. Where is she climbing to?

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  16. Love the line about jutting chins and noses makes them human.
    Tweeted.

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  17. It seems as if she may be losing heart considering her thoughts about it not being a good day to die. Climb is right, and upping the tension. Wow.

    http://chellecordero.blogspot.com/2016/10/lets-go-paintballing-snippet-sunday-oct.html

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  18. Yikes, she's in sooo much trouble. Great snippet!

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  19. 'Really, though, what day was?' That's for sure. Hope this won't be her day to die. Great snippet!

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  20. I sure hope she is going to be okay up there. Or is she climbing into a worse situation? These snippets are too short. LOL

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  21. Man, you keep us on the edge of our seats each week, Teresa. Now I want to know desperately what this contest is going to be about. And the "Climb" command, hasn't made it one bit better! Great snippet!

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