It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented
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other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a
solitary writer's heart good.
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This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand. He's not a slaver--and he saved Lily, sort of. He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind.
They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered, and have arrived at what she thinks might be the helm of the ship she's on.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand. He's not a slaver--and he saved Lily, sort of. He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind.
They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered, and have arrived at what she thinks might be the helm of the ship she's on.
She thought she'd gotten away from the slavers...
The excerpt:
The excerpt:
"Her voice went silent and that had
nothing to do with Theusand. In front of her, a Bulrager stood with his back to
them. There was no mistaking the wasp waist and the blue-black armor, not the browns
and beiges of low-status, alien kidnappers. Her legs started to tremble.
Theusand’s words whispered in her mind,
or to her ears; she was oblivious to where they fell. He coaxed, “Lily, do you
not yet know I have sufficient power to stop any ill dealings he might
attempt?”
The Bulrager turned. Dev Areen.
He stood tall, threw
back his shoulders and stuck out his chest, striking his terrifyingly familiar
pose. The rooster." That's it. All opinions greatly appreciated. :-) Thank you so much for visiting and for reading!
Even his reassurance doesn't seem to quell her worries. Good job.
ReplyDeleteTeresa, I forgot to sign up in time.
Diane Burton http://dianeburton.blogspot.com
Thanks for adding me to the list.
DeleteYou are so welcome, Diane. ☺
DeleteYeah, I don't think I'd be too reassured at the moment.
ReplyDeleteI can understand why she'd be frightened even with Theusand's assurances. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI can really sense her terror here- great job!
ReplyDeleteGreat show of her terror! Just seeing him through her eyes gives the reader the idea she fears him more than she trusts Theusand to protect her. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteBTW--I keep getting error messages when I click on some links this week. Is it my computer or is there a problem? I couldn't get into Amy Braun or Hywela Lynn's, for example. But got here fine. Thanks!
The same thing's been happening to me, but I don't know what's going wrong because I haven't done anything different. So weird! :S
DeleteI got error messages first thing this morning on about 50% of the links I clicked on. And now, those same links are opening just fine. I have no idea what it is. I don't think it's anything any of the blog owners have changed or done. It's a glitch somewhere, for sure.
DeleteScared into silence. I wonder what this Bulrager has in store for her.
ReplyDeleteGreat description. I wouldn't want to be entirely dependent on Theusand's protection. I'm getting the error messages too. They say the website isn't secure and might be a phishing site.
ReplyDeleteI believe in Lily! She'll kick ass when she needs to!
ReplyDeleteI can understand why she's scared.
ReplyDeleteI see why she’s scared. Great imagery.
ReplyDeleteThe offer of protection isn't too reassuring if someone's out to get you. OK while he's present and alert, but can he protect her 24x7?
ReplyDeleteBTW the next site I visited I also got an error and my browser won't let me proceed. Something about an invalid security certificate. This won't be anything you (the blogger) have done, this problem lies with the company that hosts the blog.
DeleteOh boy... I know she's terrified.
ReplyDeleteI hadn't thought to wonder about the relationship between Theusand and the slavers, but now you've got me wondering.
ReplyDeleteYup, that's a terrifying turn of events. And makes one think about Theusand...this is a fascinating story. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteHer fear is...I'm stuck for the word I want - she's terrified and it's clearly visible from your writing.
ReplyDeleteTweeted.
I hope she's safe. I'd be terrified too.
ReplyDeleteAfter all that time she had to be terrified, I wouldn't expect her to get over it so easily. Emotional snippet!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a brilliantly vivid piece of writing, I could visualise the terrifying Bulrager perfectly and her fear was palpable! I too had a few problems getting onto a few sites too!
ReplyDelete(Thank you SO much for the lovely review, I really appreciate it and I'm so glad you enjoyed Beloved Enemy, I loved writing it!)
I'm suddenly not sure that Theusand can protect her.
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