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Saturday, June 20, 2020

WeWriWa: EU33

   
Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. I'm reposting the bit about the relaxed rules in case I've missed anyone:
     In short, the WeWriWa rules have been relaxed. The goal is to maintain ease of finding the weekly snippet, but allowing more promo for published books.  You can check them out here: http://wewriwa.blogspot.com/p/the-rules-of-wewriwa.html
      We love our core group, the close-knit community that has evolved here at WeWriWa, the ease and joy of our weekly 'gathering,' but we also recognize that the time authors spend sharing and commenting has to make marketing sense, too. Time is precious.  This change would also eliminate the need for the "wonky punctuation to stay within guidelines" disclaimer.   

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     This snippet is from Emmily, Unbound, an SFR story.  To read a compilation of all snippets posted for this story, click Here: Emmily Unbound, Chapter 1  Emmily, the main character, has lost pretty much everything in the last twelve months: her marriage, her parents, her job, and her house. She and her dog, Murphy, have moved to the mountains of Pennsylvania into an old, remote, hunting camp her parents willed to her. It's her first full day here and after a trip to town to get supplies, she's in the midst of being carjacked--or kidnapped or taken hostage--out in the boonies. Last week one of her kidnappers demanded that she get out of the car. She opted to put her car in park rather than run them down. It ended with: 
For God's sake… Bet I’ll regret that decision.
        Now, the  snippet:
       
    
     My hands obey, sort of. They’re shaking so hard when I grab the door handle, I struggle to get it open. I’m not sure I’ll be able to stand. I climb to my feet and lean against the car for support. No use trying to run. I’d fall for sure, and then he’d shoot me for trying to escape. Besides, Murphy is still in the car, standing on the seat watching this nightmare unfold.
      The man leans toward me and grabs my arm. The grip is firm but doesn’t cause pain.  His voice still carries demand when he says,  “We need help…” 
If you want to read a bit more:
     He cocks his head to the side and blinks several times. His brows pinch together, then he adds, “There was a…crash.”
     My voice quivers--but at least I'm managing to speak. “I don’t know medicine or rescue or anything like that. I can’t help you. But I can…I can call an ambulance. I have no phone reception here. I’d have to drive back down the road a ways." I draw an 'X' on my chest and add, "Cross my heart, swear I’ll make the call.”
     Cross my heart? Seriously?
    
      I know. Cliffhanger after cliffhanger. I apologize. The second half of this chapter is all action and suspense. Chopping it up into snippets creates cliffhangers that don't exist in the full story. :-)
      That's it for this week. Thanks so much for reading, and if you left a comment, I'll throw in a virtual hug. 
   

13 comments:

  1. I have a feeling they're not going to want any authorities at the crash site. Very intrigued!

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  2. I wonder if she believes him or is simply scared of him.

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  3. Yeah, I doubt they'll take her word for it.

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  4. I love it - their slight strangeness and her desperation to escape. What does Murphy think?

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  5. Intriguing! Both she and I are on the edges of our seats not knowing what to believe.

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  6. LOL! The mind works in strange ways under stress :)

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  7. I'm guessing he doesn't want an ambulance or any other help from 911. Interesting the dog seems ok with this stranger so far...enjoyed the excerpt!

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  8. I had to laugh at her "cross my heart." I'm surprised she didn't let the dog out when she got out, though maybe she wanted to protect Murphy. anyway, great tension.

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  9. I chuckled at her nervous response of 'cross her heart'. His tilt of his head and his statement have me curious to know more.

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  10. I'm enjoying these cliffhangers. Cross my heart is funny.

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  11. I'm wondering what kind of crash he's talking about. It could be car, but then you've led us to believe it won't be. And yes, cliffhanger after cliffhanger! LOL When are you publishing this so I can just read straight thru?

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  12. I'm not sure he wants her to call for help, why the ambush and guns if they're in distress? Can't wait to read more. Also, fingers crossed for Murphy.

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  13. There is nothing wrong with cliffhangers. It is what we do, and what WeWriWa is all about!! It's what keeps us returning every week. And yes the tilt of his head with his appearance made me think of Data like. Interesting. Can't wait to read more. (I had to catch up from a few weeks)

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