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Saturday, May 21, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors May 22, 2016

Hello all my fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) 


Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE



Setup:  Earth has been invaded by aliens, galactic slavers. Our MC, Lily, and her dog, Jobe, were captured.     It's morning, and Lily is about to realize that an alien ship is coming toward them at the playground where they've spent the night.  .  
 


"The morning air was still as death, and smelled of death, too. One of the aliens smirked while he sat on a swing that had a seat much too small for him. The chains made a tired, rusty creak as he swung. Lily wished she had a two-by-four. She’d use it to wipe that creepy grin right off his face. 
As if choreographed to perfection, all of their faces lifted to look skyward. Then Lily heard it, the sound of approaching aircraft. Please dear God, she prayed silently, let it be friendly--a rescue maybe? After getting a closer look, terror gripped her. The descending ship had the insignia she'd seen on the news--back before Pittsburgh's TV stations had all been destroyed in a flash of corkscrewing blue light.


That's it. Lily and Jobe are about to leave Earth--much against their will.  Thanks for visiting and giving this a read. I am truly grateful for feedback. :-)

24 comments:

  1. I am so invested in this story wondering what is going to happen to the 2 of them. Great imagery about the ship, I could feel her terror.

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  2. Oh my! Things are about to get much worse! I love Lily's ever hopeful attitude. I cannot wait to find out where she ends up.

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  3. My favorite detail is the corkscrewing blue light. Our technology says that such a thing is impossible; light travels in straight lines, for all intents and purposes. So what technology do these dudes have that changes this? The detail hints at a lot.

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  4. Oh, boy. Spaceship. That's going to make escaping a tad difficult. Great snippet.

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  5. Talk about situation going from bad to worse!

    One sentence jumped out at me: "The chains made a tired, rusty creak as he swung."

    May I suggest, "The tired, rusty chains squeaked as he swung."

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  6. Oh gosh! As if things weren't bad enough. Okay, hurry up and finish this story so I can read it all the way through. ;) Fabulous, as always.

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  7. Oh, come on! Don't leave us hanging! Nice job,Teresa, at keeping us on the edge.

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  8. Great imagery. Can't wait to read what happens next. Is Jobe going to be the first dog in space? No, that was a Russian dog I believe - back in the mists of time. But I'm sure Jobe is going to go a lot further. Great snippet.

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  9. Dun dun dun! You've done such a wonderful job putting the reader in the moment, Teresa. I'm as terrified as she is right now! Can't wait for more!

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  10. This does not look good for Lily. I do like her and that she still wants to fight back and "wipe that creepy grin right off his face"

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  11. Things are going from bad to worse, but I like that she still has the will to fight, even if she can't put it into practice just yet.

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  12. I'm hoping for a hijacking, but have a feeling her ordeal is far from over. Great suspense!

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  13. Oh no!! Let's hope she's not about to be taken for a ride. She needs a deus ex machina right about now. Great tension buildup...loved how they all looked up in unison before she even notices the ship.

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  14. Well, this can't be good. Great tension filled snippet!

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  15. Well told and now we come to the end. WoW!

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  16. Great work, Teresa. Every snippet from this story has been fantastic! You've really captured the tone and characters -- fantastic work!

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  17. At least if they are lifted off the planet, maybe the poor dog will live another day/

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  18. No rescue today, clearly. Things going bad to worse. Loved the alien swinging on the child's swing. Great visual. Enjoyed the snippet!

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  19. This sounds like one of those out of the frying pan into the fire moments.

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  20. I'll be back in a second - running out to get Lily a 2 by 4!

    Tweeted.

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  21. Great writing with fantastic visuals!

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  22. Just when you think things can't get worse...

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  23. I'll be happy to loan her my .357! Yikes!

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  24. Okay, is this help on the way, or more disaster? Tense, exciting, and intriguing.

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