Weekend Writing Warriors June 19, 2016

Hello all my fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) 

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE. 

I'm changing up for a week or two. My second short story in the fictional world of Maple Cove was released this past week by RVPublishing. So, back to Earth we go, and Lily and Jobe are going to have to fend for themselves until I get back to them. :-) (I'll keep Jobe safe.)

Set up: This is Sissy's story.  She's in her early 60s, and has been looking forward to her golden years with her husband. But, a recent series of events has convinced her that he's cheating on her. In this snippet, she's shopping in a grocery store in Maple Cove (small town where everyone knows your name--and your business). She just stumbled upon a couple of women gossiping in the aisle.

           "She stepped back around the corner of the aisle and
trained her ears on their conversation. "Guys never cease to
amaze me, thinking they can keep something like that from
their wives."
           Sissy's heart started to pound. Her old Irish grandma's
words came back to her. "People who eavesdrop never hear
anything good about themselves." She pushed the cart
around the corner and watched their reaction to her sudden
appearance. Yep. She'd been the focus of their conversation.
They avoided eye contact with her; all of a sudden the two
women were real busy looking at cans of chow mein."

That's it. What works? What doesn't? Even though it's published, I appreciate your comments and learn from them. :-)

 

 

 

Weekend Writing Warriors: June 12, 2016

Hello all my fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-)  I've been gone for a few weeks--and I missed you all. :-) I have no excuse other than, life got busy.

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE

Setup:  Earth has been invaded by aliens, galactic slavers. Our MC, Lily, and her dog, Jobe, were captured.  Moving ahead a little in the story: They were loaded onto a shuttle and their captors have just hauled them off the surface into space. 
 

Looking through a small window, Lily saw stars, a glimpse of the moon, and then… nothing had ever felt worse; a knife to her heart would have been kinder. The shuttle seemed to slow and turn, bringing  Earth into view--with all of its sweet, beautiful, blue and white swirls. She wept big noisy, sobs.

Dev Areen looked over his shoulder at her and said, “Your mate and children are gone from your life.” His voice was impassive when he added, “If you weep like a coward, you will lose my favor."

As if she gave a rat’s ass about keeping or losing his favor. He had no idea who he was talking to. She was the reigning queen of 'never give up." Somehow, some way, she would see her husband and children again.

That's it.Thanks for visiting and giving this a read. I am truly grateful for feedback. :-)